WalkByFaith

@esther-c

You’re good! 🙂

@trailblazer

I thought the same thing as hybridlore, lol. Otherwise, great!

That whole thing about Albert wanting to kiss Libbie and Bert actually kissing Clara made me cringe (which is a good thing!) because how awkward would that be???? AHHHH! But it’s good! I like it!

@sarafini

OH MY GOSH I LOVE ADVENTURES IN ODYSSEY!!!!

but i probably won’t join….because I would rather just rant about Odyssey in general. So should I make a post thread where we can just “argue” about conspiracy theories, the way things “should have gone” (we’d be kind while arguing, of course, haha) or just talk about all things Odyssey?

@mineralizedwritings

It’s totally fine! Don’t feel bad! (Now I feel bad for making you feel bad! lol)

It does kind of sound like her though, so I see where you’re coming from.

Yeah, I really don’t want the romance to be the main reason for the abuse, because that just sounds “cruel” to put my characters so much for the sake of an unhealthy…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Yeah, I think so! Just might make it a little easier to understand XD I mean, in hindsight, they were at a corn shucking thing. I should’ve known they were talking about CORN ears XXD

@power @hybridlore

Great advice!

@mineralizedwritings

Ottoline from “Character Party” isn’t the one I was asking the question for, though, it’s an entirely different character. (If you check out my WIP page on KP, you’ll see it.)

@trailblazer

Nope, I think it’s just you XD I didn’t notice anything seeming weird, except I didn’t understand when Albert said, “We’ll see who gets the red ear of corn tonight!” until Dr. Hawley opened it. Anyway, I like Clara and him together so far!

@rae

Okay, I was just making sure! Hmm…. yeah, I would just tag anyone you know/people who asked about your WIP, but of course you don’t have to. It just helps them to see it.

I know that @loopylin and @kyronthearcanin write science fiction, so maybe they would be interested to read it? Sorry, I don’t know who you’ve met yet. Or maybe @whalekee…[Read more]

@grcr

Thanks! Of course!

@trailblazer

Sorry I never replied to this, but I still read it! I like where it’s going, lol. It’ll be interesting to see if Clara finds a husband XD

@jonas

I use it to mean negative traits, but you’re right, it’s a little confusing. I’ll change that.

@esther-c @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @smiley @whalekeeper @kyronthearcanin @savannah_grace2009 @rae @highscribeofaetherium @jonas @spinner4him @aranel

@rae

Hi!! Sorry, I would’ve gotten to this earlier, I just didn’t even see it. Do you know how to tag people already or did you just not know who to tag?

It seems interesting so far! I think the biggest thing I noticed was that your paragraphs are really long — I think it would be easier to read if you split the paragraphs up, but that’s sort…[Read more]

@jonas

That’s a great idea! The problem is, on my google account I have, it’s my school account and the docs I make can’t be shared with anyone else that has a non school account. I will, however now post the link to my “reedsy” account, (it’s like google docs, but no one can edit or comment.

h ttps://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ Copy and paste…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Well, I’ve asked myself that question multiple times. So since it’s an allegory, I think it was needed to show that God accepts us out of many different situations and no matter what we’ve been told, we’re always loved. It also builds the romantic aspect between the two MC’s because one comforts the other during flashbacks (thought…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Well, I’ve asked myself that question multiple times. So since it’s an allegory, I think it was needed to show that God accepts us out of many different situations and no matter what we’ve been told, we’re always loved. It also builds the romantic aspect between the two MC’s because one comforts the other during flashbacks (thought…[Read more]

@sarafini

I forgot to mention that most of the things that you’ll find wrong with this thread have already been mentioned by others and have been either fixed or the chapters deleted and replaced.

I deleted the paragraphs about the races, and fixed multiple other problems. Maybe I need to make a new thread for the new and improved WIP, lol.

@spinner4him

Yess!!! Read and reread them, they’re amazing. My family might be starting the first one as a read aloud, too! 😁 I’ve been trying to get my siblings to read them forever. Who’s your favorite character?

@savannah_grace2009

I don’t really know much about abuse effects or anything like that other than I’ve read in books, thankfully. One thing I would ask is, is it absolutely necessary to the plot/character? Because I think that can really easily become a cliched, sort of stereotypical in books, so if you’re just throwing it in there to make the…[Read more]