WalkByFaith

@the_lost-journal

Pax

@the_lost-journal

Phew, so glad it didn’t actually happened. No worries! I’ll continue to pray for her.

@linus-smallprint

Yeah. I didn’t think it was realistic for her to be able to keep disappearing without her family knowing.

@ellette-giselle

Leon!!! I didn’t think you would kill him!!

I didn’t feel like the overseers punishing Leon instead of Ian was unrealistic. However, I’m starting to wonder what Ian did to deserve it. I know they’d had their eyes on him, but all he did was trip, right?

Julian’s scene was good too. I liked how it started raining and they were…[Read more]

@theshadow

Awesome, thanks!

@linus-smallprint

Great, thank you!! What made you guess that? You’re right xD

@the_lost-journal

Oh no, I’m so sorry. Praying for them 🙏

@theducktator

Whattttt

That’s crazyyyy!

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h

Yeah, that makes sense. I’ve read the Ilyon Chronicles, which kind of has a similar vibe to your story’s time period and world, and one of the side characters (Christian) married a former prostitute after she became a believer. So, maybe it kind of reminded me of that, I don’t know.

@ellette-giselle

Yep lol.

Yeah, that makes sense. I couldn’t remember if it was an area he went through often or not.

Gotcha. Yeah, I get that. I was wondering if she might become a love interest for Julian, but if not, it’s probably better not to involve her too much.

@ellette-giselle

To be honest, I kind of guessed she was going to be a prostitute, so Julian’s reaction seemed a little much (especially to seeing her bare shoulder or whatever lol.) But then I reminded myself that it was different back then, so it made sense.

I would like to see her become a bigger part of the story, unless that doesn’t wor…[Read more]

@keilah-h

I’ve tried. I think she enjoys tormenting us 😂

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in our minds would be a big thing you…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry it took me so long to get to this!!!
I like it a lot!!!! <3 keep it up!!!!

@ellette-giselle
Ohhhh, okay. Wow, that is a longgg book. XD

@ellette-giselle

Oh, okay. Out of how many pages total?

And are these Word/Docs pages, or like actual book pages?

@ellette-giselle

Augghhhhh.

Wow, this book felt way shorter than the second one. Is that the case, or was it just me?

Out of curiosity, how far are we through the book by now?

@ellette-giselle

Please tell me you’re not really going to kill him off.

Also, if Albee is the one to tell him, then we don’t get to see what happens. 🙁

@theshadow

Really know your characters and try to build conflict between them naturally. (There’s probably lots of articles about that, maybe some even on here.) The better you know and understand your characters, the easier writing will feel, especially if you don’t have a super clear plot and are more just following the events of a certain time…[Read more]