Raegan Aubrey

@jonas

I just looked it up and apparently an eagle can barely carry 20 pounds….. 

Oh, well….it’s fantasy so…….

@jonas

Yep, lol

@rae

i love that scene!!!!!!!

@jonas

Marcurious

“Rideable?” Marcurious screeched. “If you think I will allow you to ‘ride’ me like a horse, than you are sorely mistaken!” the man glared at him. “Fine. But you will not ride me.”

So Marcurious closed his eyes and changed into a large eagle. Before the man knew what was happening, Marcurious launched up and grabbed the man…[Read more]

Oh, and I don’t know what the theme color would be, probably light blue/gray? Idk, you can decide.

@hybridlore

Hey, do you want to make another one for Lilitu?

He has black hair with blue streaks in it, he has a twisted foot so he limps a lot. He was saved from the river as a baby because his parents set him adrift to save him from being kidnapped by the Pythonos. He was rescued and adopted by a loving couple. He has a crush on Sef but can’t…[Read more]

Marcurious

He watched in awe as Vethe was choked by a black vapor. Cool! Well, it wasn’t cool for Vethe, but seriously, those king’s powers were awesome! Except the fact that he almost killed someone, but still…

“Fetch her! You will not, I can,” the king said.

Marcurious seriously did not want to be Vethe right now…

Koshtin

“Fetch her! And you will not, I can.”

I didn’t want to make a topic for this, but wanted to write it anyways…

The sound of drums seemed to shake the very foundation of the vacation house. Nae looked innocently up the set of winding stairs that led to Jr’s room with her large, childish eyes.

“Da, why is Junior trying to bring the house down with his drums?” Nahim gathered up his…

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Okay, here is the current headache of the year…

Nahum-Alpha Slit Silvanus Thurston Dare Krogen Fives Grath

Warning, the arrangement may change later and I might add another name!

Now I shall disect his name! Each part has a meaning to his parents (he was their first child, so he got loaded on with meaning)

Nahum-from his father’s adoptive f…[Read more]

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

You guys have already read the next chapter, the one where Lilitu steals the loaf of bread. So I’ll skip to the fourth chapter, when Lilitu’s walking home from his thievery, lol

And as always, don’t feel like you have to read it. I don’t want anybody panicking, lol

Chapter 4: Strange Magick

Lilitu stood at the edge of…[Read more]

Not really a storyline, more like just points.

• Brandt saves Brenna, a slave/his Sweetheart
• Brandt’s leaders and fellows
• Brandt’s mission that he fails, falls and breaks his leg. Wounded.
• Elderly man takes him in, caring for him, not afraid to share beliefs.
• Brandt returns to fellows, overcome with guilt, pain, sorrow, depression,…

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@highscribeofaetherium ↑↑↑

It’s as a Vow, and It’s as a Rule

A little child’s first cry,

It’s little voice piercing the sky.

It’s as a vow and it’s as a rule,

That life should spring forth fresh and new.

A little toddler with feet so small,

Pads down the grass that is so tall.

It’s as a vow, and it’s as a rule,

That life should be given to you.

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@jonas

“A hero is the one who bleeds, red drops that fall like planter’s seeds.”

@rae

Yeah, I was a little worried about that…do you think it would help if I gave Brenna’s master a name? The young soldier must remain unnamed, for my own reasons, but I could give the master a name. I’ll rearrange the paragraphs so it’s easier to understand what’s going on.

Yeah, I think that would help a lot.

For the title, maybe “Murderer”?

@jonas

you’re fine!! no worries! 🙂

@highscribeofaetherium

Koshtin

Koshtin’s crooked smile faided on his lips. His eyes went pale as death, his hands had a black vapor. The black vapor became like a ring around her neck. She felt something choking her, but it couldn’t be pulled away, for her fingers passed through it, yet it still held her. Her feet floated six inches above the…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @savannah_grace2009

The biggest thing I noticed for critiquing was that it was kinda confusing with all the characters who was doing what. I got lost on who the soldiers were and who the slaves were in the first few paragraphs and kinda got lost on what everyone was doing whilst reading.

Yeah, I was a little worried about…[Read more]