Raegan Aubrey

@janellebelovedpig

I miss her already

The above post by @thearcaneaxiom has put me in memory of a weapon my brother and I developed a while ago. It doesn’t have a name but it was given to my character Alpha by a guy named Abdeel.

It’s a knife, with a blade surrounded by green mist. It can pierce stone, and is a poisoned blade. It chooses one master, and unless the master gives it…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

That’s dark. I can see Grathmere doing that.

Who owns the blade?

@thearcaneaxiom

Excellent question. Yes, it doesn’t go all the way down to the feet, but it’s a shield designed to be protective of threats more in front and above. It isn’t meant to be a body shield, but a soldier can stake the shield into the ground, then crouch beside it when in assault. They can also lower the shield by rotating the top to th…

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@freedomwriter76

Oh, I just don’t understand the whole story (not the backstory, just the whole scope of the story) but I wouldn’t expect to when I haven’t read everything you’ve written about it 😊

That’s probably cuz I haven’t written all of it! I just kinda make up a character, make up a backstory and make up random scenes and eventually patchwo…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Thanks. **Me not knowing what else to say for a few minutes…**

I have a current WIP in which, Alpha is not even born yet. I have a like ten WIP’s that are in the thought and jot stage. the Alpha story is one of those.

What don’t you understand?

@thearcaneaxiom

I need to make a mental note of that shield shape…That has potential. Thanks for sharing!

Just one question, how do they maneuver the shield when they fight? The unique shape causes me to wonder if the top part would not hinder certain movements, for instance, protecting their feet. I see, by placement of the handle, the shield…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @anyone

CONTINUED FROM EARLIER…

Two elves bore Alpha upon a stretcher into a cell, where Grathmere was held. Carefully, they set him down, and exited the cell. Alpha glanced at his father before staring at ceiling of an unidentifiable type of stone.

Grathmere was in his normal elven like form, with fiery eyes and ashen skin.…

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@jonas

You might not care, but I try to maintain a fairly equal ratio of male MCs to female MCs in a book. This shouldn’t be the deciding factor, but consider that adding Liv as a MC would give you a 2 to 4 ratio (double the amount of female characters to male), whereas you currently have as even a ratio as possible with 2 to 3.

Obviously, you m…

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@freedomwriter76

Oof, sounds pretty sad to me…poor siblings 🥺 (sounds pretty angsty XD)

From what I’ve read, your book seems really interesting!! 💕🤩

Well that scene was from an old story, which gave me the idea to write my current WIP based off of that. So it didn’t make it through editing, neither did most of that very sloppy 41K very rough “dr…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!

**Me dying inside cuz I spent an hour typing the end of Grathmere’s story and it wouldn’t post**

Anyway, attempt NO. 2 shall appear soon, just give me another hour…**groans**

@thearcaneaxiom

Actually, I haven’t yet! I make mental note of that. Thanks!

@freedomwriter76 @anyone

THE CONCLUSION OF GRATHMERE…

His son, his only living son, lay dying in his arms. So powerful was he, but he could not even save his son. A slit of red appeared under Alpha’s black lashes, his eyes were slightly open.

“You did this. It was your people, your allies who have done this.” The once strong voice of Alpha had…

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@power @hanako @thearcaneaxiom

CRYSTAL SWORDS, The weapon of Thurston.

Twelve-year-old Nahim cast little bits of metal and crystal across a rough floor in disgust. He hung his head, every minute of free time he had gone to his little private hiding hole and labored over this project for months, and yet he had no progress to show it. He figured a…

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@thearcaneaxiom

Sure!

@jonas

I would say it completely depends on relevance to the main plot. Is she going to have future interactions with the main cast? Will her actions have an impact on the overall story? If not, then I would say it would be best not to, but there is another option.

Yeah, she’s going to play a part in the story.

That makes sense, I’ll experiment I…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Only read this if you want too…but look how outdated the style is!!! I can’t believe I used to write like this, and that was just last year! CRINGE. This is one of the only scenes that I teared up during…and i still don’t really get why. It’s not that good tbh…

Jorryn

After what seems like at least a million more steps…

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@freedomwriter76

made me cry so many times writing it tho! XD

I haven’t actually cried while writing any stories (though I have a feeling that my current WIP will do it sometime soon as it deals with abuse, romance, and evil in general and some parts are sad!).  I once wrote a sad chapter last spring for a school assignment about this boy who was…[Read more]