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Active 1 month, 3 weeks ago- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have a chapter…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge
Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Help me pick a colorful name for this magic system in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
My favorite is Chromancy, but I also like Chromamancy, Prismathurgy, and Spectrathurgy. For some reason the sole “t” and “l” sounds bother me when placed in front of “urgy”.
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-GRCR- replied to the topic The potato army WIP. in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Sorry I’m late in getting back to you.
Yeah, that was a creepy story. I don’t have too much to say about it—I agree with Linus about the pacing. I, too, like your use of repetition here. 😊
in my reached up to my ears, to feel them blood… leaking out of them…
I think I get what you’re saying here, but I had a bit of a hard time…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
😊👍
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Flash Fiction Critique Needed!!! in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
@esther-c Gotcha! A P.S. would be fun, but it might lessen the impact of the ending, so it depends on what you do. As it is right now, it doesn’t scream “actual letter” to me. It’s kind of like a thank-you-note (not exactly, but I don’t know how else to explain it.) or just a note. With a word count as short as yours, that’s fine, but maybe it’d…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Fantastic! I’m so excited to read what you wrote!
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
The rules are that you write at least 500 words, and when the deadline day comes, you post your story here.
Micah 7:8 Do not rejoice over me, my enemy; when I fall, I will arise. When I sit in darkness, the Lord WILL be a light to me.
No idea what that means…
Perhaps, I can share why I love this verse so much:
This verse is Is…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Flash Fiction Critique Needed!!! in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?
Thanks!! Oh yes, that was so hard! I was going to keep it lighthearted and goofy, and then I was like, Hold on. And tried something a little different. 😛
Ummm… a…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The potato army WIP. in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Wow, that was creepy. I guess I don’t like horror. But it was pretty well-written, I think. It was cool how you tied the ending into the beginning.
If you want feedback faster in the future, I would tag people, otherwise your post gets buried underneath all the other topics and we have to go scrolling for it. Although, if you e…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Lolol! I would ask @jonas since he’s the leader of the Adventure one. I don’t know who’s in charge of the others… I’m sure @whalekeeper would know.
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hybridlore replied to the topic Flash Fiction Critique Needed!!! in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?
Also, are you planning to add a name at the top?
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Great! I’m looking forward to it!
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
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Esther replied to the topic The Purple Eyed | My Current WIP in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
No worries!! :))
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Esther replied to the topic You know you are a writer when… in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Lol! Frfr 🤣
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Esther replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
sounds great!! Tysm!!
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Esther replied to the topic Flash Fiction Critique Needed!!! in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
Thanks ladies!! I will definitely consider that!
Thank you!! Yes, I love it too!
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah_h @koshka @freed_and_redeemed trailblazer @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet_pidyon @power @jonas
Please pardon me, everyone…I can’t believe I forgot about the deadline!!!!! So sorry about that…
Well, it looks like all things work together for good since Esthe…[Read more]
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