Trailblazer

@esther-c

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

Glad I was able to help!!!!!

I do love your dialogue though…you’re so talented in that area!!! Just maybe breaking it up would help A LOT. Because too much o…[Read more]

@stephie

I feel like it totally depends on the situation.

Though, at least for me, something doesn’t feel right about saying “your religion is wrong and false.” Because that tends to get people defensive and push them away from Jesus. I feel way more comfortable with saying “I believe that there is only one God….(etc…)” and just sharing what…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

@grcr

Mmm. If that’s how other books do it, I guess it could work. I looked it up and some people say to extend the vowels and smooth con…

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@savannah_grace2009

Mmmm…that does make sense, I’m just not sure how to do that.

Instead of “hope”, my characters are trying to fix their problems themselves. Which might be a “false hope”, but I don’t really see it as hope. I understand what you mean, I’m just not exactly sure how to do that.

Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you…[Read more]

@hybridlore

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@theducktator

Thanks! It’s my first…and I’m pretty pleased with how it turned out. After thinking about it, though, I think I will add some pictures and edit some of the words. Guy has two sides of himself. and the board doesn’t really show the second side of him…so I’m thinking of updating it.

@liberty

The blurb looks great! Very intriguing.

@elishavet-pidyon

Sorry…I looked for the Susan story but couldn’t find it. I found some others, but none of them compared to the one I read. It was short, but very beautiful, sweet, and Christian.

If you like, I can retell what I remember of the story.

@ellette-giselle

Ooh…we’re getting to see a little bit of Leon’s past!

So wait, are the only people at that place students? I don’t see much mention of villagers during that winter season. If there were villagers, did they move into the University as well?

Is their inn connected to the University? Because in that deep of snow… amid a b…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Me too!

@keilah-h

@hybridlore @elishavet-pidyon @ellette-giselle (In case you were wondering about Guy as well)

Here’s somewhat of a summary:

A man searching for redemption from his past…
 
A band of outlaws trying to make a difference…
 
A land twisted and poisoned by its cold-hearted rulers…
 

Guy is a young man living with a deep inner…

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@ellette-giselle

True, true 😂

And it has a lot to do with–––––

You’re just going to leave me hanging? XD

Ahh, gotcha.

@ellette-giselle

Great section!! I think you pulled it off. It doesn’t feel too odd or confusing. We are told when the time is passing by, and given a few details, and then the winter is over.

and the other down Julian’s back while he lay sleeping.

😂😂😂 Talk about a rude awakening!

I’m interested in Leon’s backstory more now. He seems to be hidi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Well, your moodboards did show that.

@ellette-giselle

Well, I’m guessing someone is going to get thrown into a colosseum. You have five guys there…some of them are bound to get hurt…or killed. It just has to happen.

@ellette-giselle

Ahhh!!! I remember now! Thanks for showing that verse to me. I’m all caught up. Finally. I’m hoping not to get behind in the future because then you have to read a lot more!!!

@liberty

Violin would be easier to learn coming from a pianist background! But yeah, I understand if you already have too many instruments.

I will say that it’s hardest in the beginning, probably. When you are just starting out, it’s hard to get it to sound good. But if you can stick with it for a few months, it gets better. 😉

@hybridlore

Nope. That was the one instrument I longed to play…but am pretty sure I won’t. It looks SO hard! Plus, I already play the piano and ukulele and am planning to pick up the guitar this year.

So, yes, playing the violin is one of my never-to-be-fulfilled-unless-God-intervenes dreams.

@ellette-giselle

“Why? Who’s going to read it?”

Wasn’t Julien journaling as well? Maybe he should say something else?

Leon was watching Julian with astonishment. Never had he heard him give such strong and quick responses in an argument like this.

This is by far the most interesting part I’ve read!!!! I love it!

Julian lunged and grabbed the stu…

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@ellette-giselle

That section from Aelic reminds me so much of the “Winter King”! So far, I think his salvation story was the best! Well, there weren’t that many details concerning Roland and the others… anyway, that’s what I think.

@ellette-giselle

So, I’m assuming Roland lives with Rolf’s family?