Trailblazer

@elishavet-pidyon

I love that soo much!! That was always so sad to me. I didn’t know C. S. Lewis told everyone what happened to her afterward!

You should totally write it!!

@theshadow

I would love to see it!

@theducktator

Lol. Everything looks better with an ellipse.

I’ll watch that. 

@anyone-interested

*whistling*

I’m just casually going to share my unfinished playlist for TPE… (I also decided I am going to keep writing it and post it eventually—I was feeling dramatic a while ago when i decided to let my TPE topic fade, idek :P)… I wanted to use a prompt, but i can’t find one I like so im doing whatever I want. no one can s…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉

@linus-smallprint

Awesome! I approved it.

@liberty

I’m going to be able to submit something!!!!!!!

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Y’all were talking about British and Australian exclamations and it reminded me of something that happened recently…

So we have friends who are Australian, but their dad is the only one who actually naturally has the accent. I’m a sucker for the Aussie accent, lol. And I was talking with him one time and with some…[Read more]

Also, one thing I just thought of; we don’t really care about the characters’ families since we haven’t met them yet. Maybe it would be a good idea to lengthen the first chapter by showing Jack and Elina getting home and seeing their parents and siblings.

@theshadow

This chapter does a good job building up the suspense! The only thing I would say is yeah, Ellette has a point. These girls seem to be so mean for no real reason that I can guess at yet. It makes them feel flatter, rather than like actual people who have motives and stuff for their actions. Their ultimate goal, especially in a…[Read more]

@jonas

Wow. I love this idea. This sounds super interesting. Is it connected to your current series?

@jonas

I like Spectrachromy… and Chromancy…

Prismathurgy is alright… but I’m not head over heels about it…

I don’t really like the other five… 😁

@ellette-giselle

Aw, that’s okay! If you know of a different way to get it through, I’m open to trying other things, but I understand if it’s too difficult for you to do right now.

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have a chapter…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]

@jonas

My favorite is Chromancy, but I also like Chromamancy, Prismathurgy, and Spectrathurgy. For some reason the sole “t” and “l” sounds bother me when placed in front of “urgy”.

@the_lost-journal

Sorry I’m late in getting back to you.

Yeah, that was a creepy story. I don’t have too much to say about it—I agree with Linus about the pacing. I, too, like your use of repetition here. 😊

in my reached up to my ears, to feel them blood… leaking out of them…

I think I get what you’re saying here, but I had a bit of a hard time…[Read more]

@raxforge

😊👍

@theshadow

Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]

@esther-c Gotcha! A P.S. would be fun, but it might lessen the impact of the ending, so it depends on what you do. As it is right now, it doesn’t scream “actual letter” to me. It’s kind of like a thank-you-note (not exactly, but I don’t know how else to explain it.) or just a note. With a word count as short as yours, that’s fine, but maybe it’d…[Read more]