Trailblazer

@rae

Thanks! I fixed the stall part in my document, but it won’t let me edit my post anymore.

@jonas

So, the king has been traveling for a while. He wasn’t aware of the rules put on the people by his regents, who he’d appointed to take care of the country while he was gone.

When I wrote it, I was trying to create sort of an allegory. I know it’s not perfect, but that’s what I was thinking when I came up with it. The king is meant to…[Read more]

@jonas @rae

I added a few sentences that hopefully resolve it a little better? I’m not sure. Do you still think it’s missing something?

… I can’t believe I didn’t see it before—who he was. The suspicion has grown inside of me for weeks, strengthening with each day that passed. When the guards disappeared from the marketplace. When the curfe…

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@rae

Alright! XD Thanks, I appreciate it.

@grcr

Got it!

@jonas

Yeah, I knew it was pretty obvious. I’m not sure how else to write it (where it’s not obvious) in such a short word count.
So, yeah. As soon as I posted it I was like, oh, I need to add something that talks about how the rules/guards have been changed. Really when I wrote it I was thinking it’d have a few more scenes, but then when I got…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Ok! Thanks!!

yyyyetttt…. though it’s confusing, I may or may not change it… idk…

There are lots of characters with similar names in this story, and—since there are lots of siblings—it’s kinda how I group the characters family-wise… and, yeah, though Blaine and Blair aren’t related, I kinda tie them together in my min…[Read more]

@grcr

Ugh, I know, that’s the worst. Maybe try Nameberry? I usually go there for names.

@hybridlore

Thanks!!

😅 Oof, yeah… I had named them before I came up with the book, and it wasn’t supposed to be confusing…

@grcr

I like it! Blair and Blaine are really similar names, though. That might get confusing, unless it’s intentional?

@koshka This is really beautiful!

@esther-c

I think Sef and Chase are basically done talking (so are Liv and Lukas)…so sure!

@esther-c

Yeah, Rylee loves her dog named Bear, and just animals and general XD

…heh hee hee…

…an extremely short snippet of an upcoming chapter in my book…

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Belle walked along the garden pathway. Each step she took was place in a slow, queen-like manner. Her hourglass body was clothed in one of her purple mermaid dresses, and it sparkled and shined in the morning sun. Gold earrings dangled from her small…[Read more]

@smiley

Thank you all for the nice comments and feedback, I’m taking everything into consideration and I’m thankful to have people who are willing to be honest and encouraging

😊

also to answer the most popular question, no this wasn’t the first chapter or anything, so all the characters would be properly introduced in the actual book

Ohh… I see…

@trailblazer

Oh this is so fun! Yeah, it’s after Christmas, but I’m answering anyway. XD

how do you celebrate Christmas Eve/Christmas?

Typically our church has a Christmas Eve service, so we’ll go to that. For Christmas Eve dinner, we’ll eat finger foods and we make a punch with Hawaiian Punch, 7-UP, and orange sherbet. Then there’s this cute…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I know this is late, but I’ll be praying for him too. That’s tough. ❤️

@everyone

What do y’all think about switching parnters for the next dance? Of course you can finish up your conversations and such though. 😉