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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Oh no!!! That’s terrible!!! That makes me want to cry for you!
I know. I was so mad.
Hmm, I find it funny that you think the ending thing feels a little un-realistic. I wrote it after reading of five different situations in different countries where something like this happened to Believers who had been arrested. XD
I guess the B…
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
THEOLOGY/MESSAGE
~ Any theological concerns for the story?
I don’t think so.
~ What would you say my world view was?
Christian? XD. (Again, I don’t really know what kind of answer you want here.)
~ What would you say was the message of the story?
God will give us strength when we are weak and help us have the courage to stand up for Him.
~Were…
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
STORYLINE
~ Was the plot solid and engaging?
~ Did the pacing feel consistent throughout the book? If not, where did it lag or feel dull?
I feel like these two kind of go together. The pacing, I felt, was not very consistent. Sometimes we would be skipping over weeks or months, sometimes we would get slow, slice-of-life scenes, and sometimes we…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
I’m flexible, so whenever everyone else is ready to read the next book is fine with me. And is it about Leon and Julian?
K, here’s the characters section.
CHARACTERS~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?
Joseph, because he’s the main. 🤪 But no, really, we got to see all his inner…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
I WAS LITERALLY ON THE ILLUSTRATION QUESTION 😣
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
I was so, so close to finishing your questions, and then a bee came over by me, and I picked up my laptop and ran away (lol.)
But then I accidentally hit the screen somehow and I CLOSED THE LINK!!!
Augggghhhh. I cannot believe that just happened. Now I have to write them all out AGAIN. So this might take a while.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
AHHH ELLETTE YOU SAVED THEM!!!
AND IT’S DONE!! CONGRATULATIONS!! (I know this is a later draft, but still xD)
Biggest thing I noticed, is that, in the end where Joseph and Amelia are talking, some of the things that they say, “I’m so glad that… etc.” seemed a little bit like info-dumping. It’s good for us to have all that in…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Sorry, didn’t get tagged! 😒
That does sound like fun! We always stay up till midnight too—last night we had a bunch of neighbor kids over, so we watched some YouTube videos and then played some games until midnight. I don’t think I’ve made any resolutions… but we’ll see, there’s still time.
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-GRCR- replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Happy Almost New Year everyone!
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Happy Almost New Year! What are you guys up to?
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hybridlore replied to the topic You know you are a writer when… in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Aww, your relationship with your brother sounds so sweet.
Same—we played with our stuffed animals too. We had maybe thirty of them between us, and they all belonged to a “pack” with an alpha, and a beta, etc. (Me and my sister were Erin Hunter fans.) We acted out whole storylines—probably enough to fill a novel xD.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Wow, that’s really cool. Definitely keep them in then.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Wait, you wrote the hymns? I thought you had just pasted them in. 😳
(There’s a lot of hymns I’m not familiar with, since we don’t normally sing them at my church.)
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hybridlore replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 5 months ago
I finished! (And the art for the cover is really cool.) I gave answering those questions a shot, even though you might be past the point of feedback, I figured you might want to hear what I thought.
Were the characters believable?
For the most part, yes. At times, there was somewhat stilted (slightly forced seeming, or maybe a…[Read more]
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Kate DiCamillo in the forum Book Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Lolololol 😂 maybe I am out of my mind
I love soup in real life—awh, chicken noodle is one of my all-time favorite things to eat—but the word is just…. Sooooup? Ew. lol I just can’t with how it sounds.
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Kate DiCamillo in the forum Book Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Yeah, I wasn’t fond of it. I don’t remember why I don’t like it either, I just don’t.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
You can’t leave me hanging there!! 😖 Although, I’m wondering if I want to know what happens next.
No real changes to the scene that I could think of. The one hymn is pretty long, but if you want to include it all, that’s fine.
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 5 months ago
AHHH Your art looks sooo good!!! I LOVE it!!!!! The girl in the flower field is so pretty!!! 😍😍 Amazing job!
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Kate DiCamillo in the forum Book Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
My siblings and I listened to an audiobook of The Tale of Despereaux several years ago. Never watched the movie though. I liked it—although it has been fuel for my dislike of the word soup. I loved the rats. 🤭 We were going to make our dolls (or Legos, I can’t remember) act it out once… that was fun to imagine though we never follo…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Kate DiCamillo in the forum Book Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Yes, I do like stories with animal protagonists.
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