Trahia the Minstrel

@rae awesome!!!!

Can’t wait for more!

Feedback time lol

Indeed, the fire showed his features mostly came from his human side, besides his grey eyes. His grey eyes were deep and filled with emotion

You don’t need to reference the eyes again. A better way of doing it would be like this:

…besides his gray eyes, deep and filled with…

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@rae haha

I haven’t had to banish a character to being forgotten since I was like 13 and I might have lost the courage to do it now.

Crosshair, Hunter, Tech and the rest might not be the stars of any of my current works but they know they’re safe. They also know their limits though–five years keeping them has done its work.

Sniper…[Read more]

@raxforge @stephie @rae @ellette-giselle @theducktator

lolll this marrying conversation is so weird

I got it into my head pretty early on that it made no sense to marry my relatives. I don’t even think it was on purpose, I think my parents mentioned “you can’t marry your brother or cousins” once and my logical brain was like “oh, okay.” and…[Read more]

@loopylin oooooh that’s so pretty!!!! My whole family painted starscapes once as part of a class, and it kinda looked like that.

@savannah_grace2009 you’re welcome! and thank you!

@theducktator LOLLLL That’s an actual Dickens quote?

nvm that actually makes sense for him to say that

I mean like i have a cheese related signature lol

@raxforge That’s awesome!!

My church did a trip to Italy back in ’23 and I helped with a summer camp there. It was great.

@theshadow ooooh that’s a good idea!!

@rae @whalekeeper @ellette-giselle lol

I end up deleting a lot of my search history but if I kept it I’d have some weird stuff too

oh also RAE THAT DRAWING IS AMAZING DON’T LET ANYONE SAY IT’S NOT

listen girl, I like to consider myself good at drawing, but I’m terrible at posing characters. You being able to do that puts you a step above…[Read more]

@theducktator Phew, it wasn’t him! You saved me the trouble of an awkward conversation.

lollllll

-The plot was good, I enjoyed what you have so far.

-I’d love to get a little more in depth on your worldbuilding, but you don’t need to do that, it’s just something I enjoy.

@savannah_grace2009 I liked it! I can’t wait for more.

-The violence and stuff I can handle. About the only thing that would raise a red flag for me is what Rath did to Sef’s mom (I don’t remember her name), but you didn’t write that very descriptively and any discomfort I had with the scene was a me problem, not a problem with your writing.

-I…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium awww he’s cute!!

@theducktator

“Slothy doesn’t like going to the doctor because last time she had her back pulled out and stuffed full of donuts.”

Did that doctor look like this?

(just a sketch, not an actual portrait)

Cause I TOLD him I was gonna be nice and not let him get caught and convicted for malpractice, if only he behaved.

Stuffing someone’s spine…[Read more]

@rae

Oh, okay. The parts you added were actually my favorite and pretty easy to understand

yay!

Yes, they were great! They aren’t the normal way people usually title chapters, and I really like that, it fits with the story well.

I was partially inspired by….I wanna say they were Percy Jackson chapter titles, but I don’t remember too well. I d…[Read more]

@theducktator lol that’s their usual dynamic

Btw did you see I added chapter titles?

@savannah_grace2009 All righty! I’ll have to write some part of it for you to read.

and yeah I read fast lol

I’ll have to critique it fully tomorrow cause I don’t have time to type out a whole thing but I will get you that feedback!

@rae oh yeah and Alpha and Silvanis arguing sounds crazy.

why can I see a pair of angry Night Furies roaring at each other as the image of how that debate would go?