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BlueJay replied to the topic I need help with a line in my story in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 10 years, 4 months ago
@Ivy-Rose – It would be that in America. So when it is 30 degrees in Australia is would be like 86 in America. So because it is 5 degrees where you are is would be -15 for me. (Boy, I’m glad I’m in Aus) And yes, yes yes…why don’t you come to Australia? 😛 Just fly over and have the best holiday of your life, sweating out here, swatting flies,…[Read more]
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BlueJay replied to the topic Realistic Reactions in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 4 months ago
RA is by John Flanagan. And with a bit of fixing, they are an awesome series. If you haven’t read them you should!!!
It sounds like a book that I would cry at. (Everything makes me cry. I feel for all the heroes and when they cry so do I) Whenever we watch a movie that we know is going to be sad, my siblings say “Let’s get out the bathers and…[Read more] -
BlueJay replied to the topic Realistic Reactions in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 4 months ago
Haha. Never read it. In fact hadn’t heard of it till now. 😛
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BlueJay replied to the topic Realistic Reactions in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 4 months ago
I find I actually prefer to write about males then females. Seeing as my favourite topic to write about is war, I guess I shouldn’t be surprised!!!
@joy-schmidt have you watched Narnia-Prince Caspian? (I’ve only just watched it. So good. Cried heaps and heaps.) Your prince makes me think of him. He is calm and cautious, but when he learns about…[Read more] -
BlueJay replied to the topic I need help with a line in my story in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 10 years, 4 months ago
Thank you. I’ve been sleeping while you’ve all been thinking and writing. 🙂 Hehe The joys of living in a different time zone. 😛
@writefury – the line “Again, not a smart thing to say” is actually a tie-in to a previous comment.
I really wish you could all read the story. It is probably too long to post on the forum. But you’d be able critique it…[Read more] -
BlueJay replied to the topic I need help with a line in my story in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 10 years, 4 months ago
@rolena-hatfield – Yes Australia is an awesome place. At the moment we are in our second month of summer and it is a sweltering heat of about 30C inside (which is about 86F). But summer is my favourite month so I don’t really mind. (Which is really weird cause I was born in winter!!! But I find I get sick more often when it is wet on cold.:()…[Read more]
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BlueJay replied to the topic I need help with a line in my story in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 10 years, 4 months ago
@kate-flournoy– Anna and her parents aren’t animals. She goes to Africa (Masai Mara reserve) to stay with her uncle. There she rescues a baby giraffe stuck in the mud (Savanna) and falls in love with her.
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BlueJay replied to the topic I need help with a line in my story in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 10 years, 4 months ago
@kate-flournoy – Thanks. That’s a good way to say it for humans but I’m not sure if it works for animals. Here is the other part of the story where it is used.
“Savanna’s not a pet, Anna.”
“Yeah, I know but…”
“No ‘buts’.”
“But I want her to be safe. It’s so dangerous out there. Anything could happen.”
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BlueJay replied to the topic I need help with a line in my story in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 10 years, 4 months ago
You’ll all have to excuse spelling errors and grammatical problems. I am dreadful with checking my own work. *And I call myself a writer!!!!!!!!!!!* 😀
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BlueJay started the topic I need help with a line in my story in the forum Start HERE 10 years, 4 months ago
G’day All, (I’m Australian)
Yes, I am new to the forum but I have been following it quite closely. But I got stuck while writing a short story and I decided to see what you guys could come up with.
Here is part of the story and the line I don’t like.“Us? Go to Africa? How could we afford it? Think how dangerous – and anyway we’re both…[Read more]
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BlueJay started the topic I need help with a line in my story in the forum Start HERE 10 years, 4 months ago
G’day All, (I’m Australian)
Yes, I am new to the forum but I have been following it quite closely. But I got stuck while writing a short story and I decided to see what you guys could come up with.
Here is part of the story and the line I don’t like.“Us? Go to Africa? How could we afford it? Think how dangerous – and anyway we’re both…[Read more]
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BlueJay replied to the topic Lovely Words in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 4 months ago
My favourite word – verbose. Best word I ever found!!! 😛
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BlueJay replied to the topic Perfect love poem in the forum Poetry Critiques 10 years, 4 months ago
Wow! I loved your poem. I am really bad at writing poetry, so I really admire those who can. As to titles- *rubs hands together*
Perfect Love
Breaking Free
No Fear in Love
Casting out Fear
1 John 4:18
Because of God’s Love
Love verses Fear
God is Love
Well, that’s all I can think of off the top of my head. 🙂
