TheShadow

@theshadow

okay, I really like this, but I have one big thing.

the training fight.

so first off, they would use training swords. Wooden ones or maybe blunt mettle. Mistakes happen in training and the less chance for a knight to get killed the better.
second, training is hard on the weapons so their real swords would be set aside for…[Read more]

@theshadow

I’m not great at critiquing, but I did notice one thing.

Eldred Favri, a knight under Lord Damien, was about 21.

Five today… that would make Ninety. Ninety… ninety of his beloved countrymen, women, and even children, dead.

The boy answered, grinning, then, with an air of pride, added, “I’m 7.” “Seven? Well, that certainly is a fine a…

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Oops, sorry @theshadow I forgot to tag you

@theshadow

Yes, plz come join us!

I love your charries already!

@rae

Barnes

With Reid directing, Barnes swept through multiple passages and rooms, and made sure to get an idea of the layout.

It wasn’t worth saying, but she liked the decor. Rich greens and oranges lined the inner rooms, sparkling against the surface of glass trinkets. Delicate paintings, stained with dust, barely portrayed more than…[Read more]

@theshadow

I was actually planning to have Howard get captured and taken to the zoo in a later chapter, lol.

@hybridlore

The only definition of DMV I found was Department of Motor Vehicles, so hopefully that’s right. Linda wants a Ferrari.

@rae

Ooh, a fair! She would get her beak stuck in a caramel apple. XD

@linus-smallprint

Lol I love t…[Read more]

@rae
I think you can just put them wherever.

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Ayla

Ooh, a war! This would make an amazing tale for my memoirs. “I’m Ayla,” I informed the stranger. He appeared to have changed his mind about killing me. “My guess is that we will encounter at least three more people. Rarely do…[Read more]

@theshadow haha yep! I’ll try to find a video of him playing it or something

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Chapter the 16th – The Artist

I will try to get you Chapter the 17th – The Rebel next week, but since I start work and school, no promises. I will send it out in two weeks at the latest, so you can hold me accountable to that deadline.

@theducktator

Now we just get to sit back and enjoy the drama.” He gestured toward Silvanis and the ducks.

XD

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I VOTE WE HAVE INSTRUMENTS FOR ALL THE CHARRIES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! We can make a little band and watch them struggle to get the dynamics right together! It’ll be so c…[Read more]

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Bob

Bob had sworn to stay away from hens after Serpentine’s betrayal, and now he was stuck in some kind of couples thing with the most annoying hen he knew. To be fair, she hadn’t always been this annoying. She’d been sweet and friendly at first, if rather too excitable, but he’d…[Read more]

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Silvanis

Maybe he should’ve gone lonesome and gotten something but he wasn’t hungry and Fairy hadn’t said she was so at the moment, he couldn’t care less. Besides, he was still thinking about who and why they had been taken here and how much did they know about…[Read more]

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Sniper

All that wanderin’ and naught to show for it. Except for the Lupinari, but they certainly weren’t edible.

Maybe I shoulda gone back and stripped the meat off a’ that creature. At least then we’d ‘ave had somethin’ to bring back.

Huntress didn’t look annoyed at me,…[Read more]

@theshadow ooh cool characters!

@theducktator

Crosshair

“Get thee hence, thou beetle-headed flap eared knave! Only cowards shoot girls!” the girl yelled. Not threatening at all. Crosshair could barely tell what she was even saying, but he lowered his weapon anyway.

Then she stopped, seemingly noticing that he didn’t look like an inhabitant of…[Read more]

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Tags were weird. ⬆️

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Ayla

Some one had heard me, and he had a gun. Guns weren’t supposed to exist in fantasy novels! I pointed my sword at him, hoping I didn’t look terrified. My adventure had barely begun, and I hadn’t met a single old wizard. I couldn’t die yet! “Get thee hence, thou beet…[Read more]

@theshadow

Thanks for the steps, I will use them while discerning, especially number 2. My book idea is one that is set in the middle ages, and originally it was to be set during the Black Death. Over time, however, I think this might be the thing I was stressing over. I was convicted over how dark that time period was, and how I might not be…

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@theshadow

Thanks for the steps, I will use them while discerning, especially number 2. My book idea is one that is set in the middle ages, and originally it was to be set during the Black Death. Over time, however, I think this might be the thing I was stressing over. I was convicted over how dark that time period was, and how I might not be…

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@theshadow I’d say just pray about it and then don’t worry. Trust that God will lead you. I think it’s that simple and that excessive anxiety over it is more dangerous than the story itself.

When I begin writing the story, I will post the chapters on KP.

I’m excited to read them! :]