TheShadow

@acancello @mineralizedwritings @trailblazer @grcr @rae @esther-c

Do you guys want me to make them all transfer to the other world Rae was talking about?

Or does someone else want to? I’m fine with either XD

@acancello

then pulled Ottoline close to him and together they watched the stars inch across the sky.

That is so good!!!

@esther-c

Wow, that’s so cool!

I wish I could come up with plot twists like that XD

@thearcaneaxiom

I like it! She reminds me of EVE from the movie WALL-E, lol

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

That is the way of writers🤣 Your characters feel real to you. Frank Herbert’s son felt like he had to compete with his father’s characters for love and attention, so it is a very real thing that influences our world. (Sorry if I just made that a little depressing at the end, his son happily continues his father’s legac…

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@janellebelovedpig

I miss her already

The above post by @thearcaneaxiom has put me in memory of a weapon my brother and I developed a while ago. It doesn’t have a name but it was given to my character Alpha by a guy named Abdeel.

It’s a knife, with a blade surrounded by green mist. It can pierce stone, and is a poisoned blade. It chooses one master, and unless the master gives it…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

That’s dark. I can see Grathmere doing that.

Who owns the blade?

@thearcaneaxiom

Excellent question. Yes, it doesn’t go all the way down to the feet, but it’s a shield designed to be protective of threats more in front and above. It isn’t meant to be a body shield, but a soldier can stake the shield into the ground, then crouch beside it when in assault. They can also lower the shield by rotating the top to th…

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@lydibug I’m glad you like them! 😊

@euodia-vision ok! I’ll wait about another day for them to respond

@freedomwriter76

Oh, I just don’t understand the whole story (not the backstory, just the whole scope of the story) but I wouldn’t expect to when I haven’t read everything you’ve written about it 😊

That’s probably cuz I haven’t written all of it! I just kinda make up a character, make up a backstory and make up random scenes and eventually patchwo…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Thanks. **Me not knowing what else to say for a few minutes…**

I have a current WIP in which, Alpha is not even born yet. I have a like ten WIP’s that are in the thought and jot stage. the Alpha story is one of those.

What don’t you understand?

@thearcaneaxiom

I need to make a mental note of that shield shape…That has potential. Thanks for sharing!

Just one question, how do they maneuver the shield when they fight? The unique shape causes me to wonder if the top part would not hinder certain movements, for instance, protecting their feet. I see, by placement of the handle, the shield…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @anyone

CONTINUED FROM EARLIER…

Two elves bore Alpha upon a stretcher into a cell, where Grathmere was held. Carefully, they set him down, and exited the cell. Alpha glanced at his father before staring at ceiling of an unidentifiable type of stone.

Grathmere was in his normal elven like form, with fiery eyes and ashen skin.…

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@jonas

You might not care, but I try to maintain a fairly equal ratio of male MCs to female MCs in a book. This shouldn’t be the deciding factor, but consider that adding Liv as a MC would give you a 2 to 4 ratio (double the amount of female characters to male), whereas you currently have as even a ratio as possible with 2 to 3.

Obviously, you m…

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@freedomwriter76

Oof, sounds pretty sad to me…poor siblings 🥺 (sounds pretty angsty XD)

From what I’ve read, your book seems really interesting!! 💕🤩

Well that scene was from an old story, which gave me the idea to write my current WIP based off of that. So it didn’t make it through editing, neither did most of that very sloppy 41K very rough “dr…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!

**Me dying inside cuz I spent an hour typing the end of Grathmere’s story and it wouldn’t post**

Anyway, attempt NO. 2 shall appear soon, just give me another hour…**groans**

It looks like a unicorn tail to me, but probably not to other people. Also, the green is on their backs, necks, backs of their arms and hands, and on their noses.

And here’s what the tail looks like