TheShadow

@koshka

Hello.

Now that we know each other, here’s a list of random questions about your WIP!

1. Does Igua like fish?

2. With such an aversion to butter knives, is eating butter a problem?

3. About how old is Igua at the beginning of your story?

4. What do you think inspired his character the most?

Hello, I’m called Ru or Ruee.

1. No, he d…[Read more]

@jonas

I love conviction! And oh my gosh, Flaz would drive Ellis insane, this is going to be hilarious!

@hybridlore

Oh! you didn’t have to read the entire thing today!!! Oh, well.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

Yeah, I’ve only gotten to chapter four with my paragraph revisions

What did you think of the scene in The Deal? Ya, know, this pa…[Read more]

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Okay, here’s chapter 7

CHAPTER 7-THE INVESTIGATONS
The suns were bright and shining over Ladance as two Laxdains came walking together through the dusty streets. One was taller, dressed in red coarse, but durable, clothing with a powerful blaster strapped to his side, from his thigh to his knee. The other was shorter, but with tailored and…

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@calyhuge

thanks for the feedback!

If you have only one eye, you have no depth perception. You have to bob your head like a pigeon to get the full picture.

Yes I’ve thought about this, and I guess I’ve just decided that I don’t care? Though he’s from a “sci-fi” comic book technically, I’ve kinda thrown science out the window and instead go with…[Read more]

PRONUNCIATIONS
Note: pronunciations are in alphabetical order rather than by revelance.

Of characters:

Aiqa _ Aye-quh

Akin _ Aye-kin

Alin _ Aye-lin

Azio _ Ah-zee-oh

Budeca _ Buh-deck-ka

Canin _ Cane –in

Gaygarum _ gey-gar-rum

Ginja _ Gin-juh

Grostoff _ Grew-stof, staff with an ‘o’

Hallia _ Hall-ee-uh

Jonas _ Joe-nas

Knihan _ Knee-…

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Take your time reading, I just wanted to post them and get feedback so i know how to change them

CHAPTER 9-THE DEAL
Nahim tapped his foot in the rhythm of the song he hummed. Master Paul leaned back in the pilot seat next to him, maneuvering through a bunch of asteroids before picking up his direction and heading into Cubespace. Nahim suddenly stopped his noise as a bright nebulae passed by with a flash. Master Paul smiled.

“You like n…

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Tell me if Chapter 7 is missing. Cuz I edited it, and I thought it got deleted so i tried to repost it, but then it said I had already posted it.

CHAPTER 8-AIQA
Nahim tossed his sword handle up in the air and grasped it with his left hand. He pitched it again, twirled it, gripped it, and held it with one finger (or at least tried to, his green sword was hefty). He played with the blue one in his right. Master Paul glanced at the movement in the co-pilot seat.

“You seem to be somewhat o…

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@jonas

Thanks!

I just literally figured that out about ten seconds ago and edited a post I was making and it deleted. Woops.

CHAPTER 7-THE INVESTIGATONS
The suns were bright and shining over Ladance as two Laxdains came walking together through the dusty streets. One was taller, dressed in red coarse, but durable, clothing with a powerful blaster strapped to his side, from his thigh to his knee. The other was shorter, but with tailored and comfortable clothes, and a…[Read more]

@hybridlore @power @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @kyronthearcanin @jonas @loopylin @whalekeeper @anyone-else-who-might-have-slight-interest

CHAPTER 6-ON BOARD THE NIGHTMARE
Nahim was alone and unbothered for the first time in a while. He ran his right hand over his sling for his left arm but didn’t try to move the shoulder. He was different…

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@hybridlore @power @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @kyronthearcanin @jonas @loopylin @whalekeeper @anyone-else-who-might-have-slight-interest

Next chapter…I’m just going to post most of my chapters now since I plan to change some of them soo, but want some feedback.

CHAPTER 5-MASTER PAUL
Mandin adjusted the thick band to the satchel over his…

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@highscribeofaetherium

Thanks. I’ll try doing my first mood board. **Me getting a sinking feeling that I’m going to fail**

How do you guys make your mood boards? I understand what you put on them, but how do you put them together?

How do you even edit a post? I haven’t figured that out yet. And how do you delete a post?

@jonas

I’ll try, but no promises about him agreeing. He’s shy, but maybe not seeing your faces will make him more likely to do it!