TheShadow

I’d like to improve on all writing things in general, but I guess a more specific thing I want to improve upon is my writing style and the pace that I write.

I’m currently a relatively slow writer. I will write 500-1,000 words daily some weeks, and then won’t touch my writing for a while, or will only write like 100 here and there. I’d like that…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yes, I got it.

Not sure if you got my reply….

@koshka

My warning wouldn’t be that it’s dark or violent, but that you don’t want to even accidentally imply it’s okay. You don’t want to give your reader an idea, or thought pattern they didn’t have, but you do want to reach for a kid who’s been there, or is there, and needs that lifeline. That they are loved, that they can make it with God’s he…

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@keilah-h

Arcane and Alder are good name switches! I like them. Also, are you going to keep the Payne and Pythonos references? I think you should; when you publish your book people will be like “oh, this is an expansion on that universe.”

I think I will keep the Payne/Pythonos. I agree, it would be cool!!!!

Thanks, they fit really well and I lik…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Not sure. It’s been going on ever since they hit the new town.

Maybe page 14?

I’ll have to look if you can’t find it.

@keilah-h

I don’t know if that’ll be helpful (if you mean drafting for war). You can’t exactly change your author name to a man’s….and even if you did, they’d probably try to draft “him” lol.

Oh not to a man’s! Just not my name so that I’ll be untrackable. An alias.

lso, your recent chapters were great! It’s good to see that more and more of…

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@hybridlore

Yeah, I did get a feeling he didn’t love what he was doing when he was talking with Cole.

Hey, that is the best way to write. Keep at it!

@hybridlore

It’s true! The way you write… I can see it all clearly in my mind! It really IS like a movie!

So… was it obvious before this chapter what Alec did for his job?

I knew he did something with technology and people, and I knew he worked with the government. This didn’t come as a surprise to me at all. It was good.

@hybridlore

GIRL!

How do you do it?!?!

I am so hooked! OH MY WORD! I want this made into a MOVIE!!

Wow! This is so cool. I’m worried about Everett! I hope he makes it out of this one okay. What I wouldn’t give to be in his head as he reads through all those questions!!

AND ALEC!!! Oh my word! This is great!!

@hybridlore

Thank you so much!!!!

I fixed the spelling!! Thanks for catching that XD
I appreciate you so so SO much, girl <3

@koshka @ellette-giselle @hybridlore @theducktator @keilah-h @theshadow @anyone-else

Thank you everyone for your comments on the doc!!

The reason I haven’t added anything new is because I moved it all to Reedsy. Reedsy will professionally typeset it all, and have a more professional look to it, and I like Reedsy better for writing.

The point of…[Read more]

@hybridlore

*Scream of pleasure!!!*

@hybridlore

KP is breaking for everyone. *gasp* this might be the end!!!!

Only killed off at least four pretty important characters in only two books. (Prince guy, Turin, Aaron, Adrian.) Nearly killed off all your main characters. And stated that the next two books would be even darker. 😑

*indignant sniff*

@hybridlore

“What? What did I do?” *in very innocent voice.*

@hybridlore

Yeah, good point. Maybe add something in their journal entries about how it went well, and how Leon is proud of Julian? Something like that.

Sounds good.

*eyes you suspiciously*

*grins evilly*

@hybridlore

Oh good. It’s been glitching all morning on my end.

I’m just your #1 fan 😉 Well, online fan anyway.

You 100% are!!

When did Leon start calling the governor Walter? I was a bit confused, but I probably just missed the part where you introduced him.

When the governor told him to. XD

It happened when they were looking over t…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint    @Liberty    @Hybridlore     @Koshka    @elishavet-pidyon     @Keilah-h

Just a heads up to y’all, if KP is acting up and you don’t get tagged, I normally post a section every morning, (save Sunday) baring assassination, the women’s draft (in which case I will go under ground and change my author’s name), or an opportunity…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint    @Liberty    @Hybridlore     @Koshka    @Elishavet-Eloy    @Keilah-h

Lets try this again

NEXT SECTION!!!

The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
April 30th
The Empire

Leon was not arrested as we had feared, thank God. The Governor only wanted to speak with him, and the results have been unbelievable. The…

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