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@keilah-h

(yep I’m leaning fully into it now)

Oh boy XD

What have I done lol

@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

As of right now, I have re-done parts of The Woods of Rosen which are now integral to where the story is headed (this is because I realized they would work better for the story and characters). So, I’m thinking instead of posting the chapters of the b…[Read more]

@keilah-h

look what you’ve done you’ve encouraged my obsession lollllllll

Wait, nooo!! I take it back, is it too late?! lol

Also it’s a-okay, I think this topic is kind dead anyway XD

@keilah-h
Lol

@linus-smallprint

Hard to follow the rule of staying on the path when the path itself won’t cooperate.

Yep lol.

Nice!

You guys really like the slap part huh? XD

Looks good! Waiting for the next part.

Thanks!

@whalekeeper @theducktator

Praying for both, hope you get the job Ducktator!

@whalekeeper

Stuff mostly about the medieval ages, or about sword fighting. For instance, feudalism and the exchange between peasants and lords, or the training of knights from pages to knighthood. However, at one point I was researching Irish slang for a story idea, and discovered some interesting slang such as “not looking the full s…[Read more]

@esther-c

Poor Hallie, hopefully her siblings don’t embarrass her (right?). Nice job, the chapters are good. One thing I did notice though is that in a couple of sentences you explain why a character is doing something, like “to ___” and I think you could leave that out sometimes for the reader to figure out why they’re doing something for themselves.

@ellette-giselle

Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrifying shock, use the dots if you want it to be a slow realization that settles into horror.

Ah, okay that works better. Thanks!

I have been swamped lately, but we’ll see if I can have her to you this week.

Take your time! Thanks for the comments, I’m glad the chapter gave som…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Indeed….

@hybridlore

Yay, will hopefully read it soon.

Also… don’t hurt Everett please!!

@keilah-h

Yes XD

@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

New chapter, please tear into this.

Chapter 4

Dylan stopped abruptly, “Where’s the path?”
“What do you mean ‘where’s the path’?” Olivia shoved past Elina and Jack, gazing out ahead. A seemingly endless sea of trees met her.

“Oh, great, nic…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Hmm, well I guess in the woods around Rosen, I don’t think so. The woods are massive, and nothing really lives there. Besides, a creature stalking about doesn’t help, and something that could take a town could probably pick me off pretty quickly (wish I could say more but that would be spoilers).

As for Terre, which is where my…[Read more]

@rae

If you’ve ever read White Fang, there’s one part in the beginning where this guy knows he’s going to be eaten by wolves, and as he’s attempting to survive despite them, he’s described as appreciating his body a lot more than he ever did before. For instance, he begins studying his hand and the way it’s made, at the intricacies of each print…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Those are great ideas, thank you so much!! This is spurring a lot of ideas now, thanks.

@linus-smallprint

Understandable. Contemporary writing is kind of like writing set in the present or close to it, and are mainly based in reality.

@esther-c

Thank you for the suggestions, I’ll check them out! Okay, compelling characters seem…[Read more]

@keilah-h

(Whether you read that in his voice or however you imagine my voice to sound is up to you.)

I’m now going to read all of your posts in Sniper’s voice now that you mention it

@linus-smallprint

Great, thank you!

@the_lost-journal

Praying for our sister and our cousin’s friend

@esther-c

Liking the story so far, it’s good. I second Trailblazer’s suggestions though, as more description would draw the reader in more.