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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Esther, I also think it’s so cool how you write about small everyday struggles. It’s hard to find beauty in the mundane, when it seems the same day after day.
But in your writing, you can make even the everyday struggles, the repeating tasks beautiful, and everything you write has a message, and I think it’s so cool!!!! And I know God will use you <33
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Awww! Esther!!! That means literally so so SO much to me!!
I appreciate you so much, you’re amazing 🥺🥺💜💜💜💜
I never really thought about it that way!! But that makes a lot of sense!!
Honestly I’ve struggled a lot with the way that I just go to the hard things that need to be talked about…people like my parents have said that my…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
It also reminds me how God uses the same talents of different people for different purposes. For example, you tend to gravitate towards darker themes (not in a bad way!) and deal with difficult topics that need to be dealt with and seen in the light of God’s love. On the other hand, I tend to focus on the smaller, everyday struggles I personally f…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Sara Sara Sara Sara Sara Sara….
Girl this is literally so good and I wish I had gotten to it sooner!!!
I can tell you poured your heart into this and can see it on every page. I’m so glad you decided to go on with this. It has already impacted me in little ways in the short time I read it and I know God will use it to imp…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
My warning wouldn’t be that it’s dark or violent, but that you don’t want to even accidentally imply it’s okay. You don’t want to give your reader an idea, or thought pattern they didn’t have, but you do want to reach for a kid who’s been there, or is there, and needs that lifeline. That they are loved, that they can make it with God’s he…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Arcane and Alder are good name switches! I like them. Also, are you going to keep the Payne and Pythonos references? I think you should; when you publish your book people will be like “oh, this is an expansion on that universe.”
I think I will keep the Payne/Pythonos. I agree, it would be cool!!!!
Thanks, they fit really well and I lik…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Thank you so much!!!!
I fixed the spelling!! Thanks for catching that XD
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
@koshka @ellette-giselle @hybridlore @theducktator @keilah-h @theshadow @anyone-else
Thank you everyone for your comments on the doc!!
The reason I haven’t added anything new is because I moved it all to Reedsy. Reedsy will professionally typeset it all, and have a more professional look to it, and I like Reedsy better for writing.
The point of…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Thank you soooo much girl…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Really?? tysmmm that means a lot <3
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Yeah…I think mostly I need to write like two more pieces, and then it’s just editing the rest. So hopefully this is doable XDXD *hopefully**
I think I just need enthusiastic pep talking right now, but emailing would help a lot too!!!
That’s totally fine!!! Just don’t let me give up lollll
That’s the main thing I’m…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Also, this isn’t going to be a novel. More like a collection of works that intertwine somehow.
I mainly just need accountability, but I would love your guys’ thoughts because I want this to be GOOD!!! It is going to a silent auction after all hahahaha
SO please tear it apart as well XD
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ started the topic PLEASE TEAR THIS APART–URGENT CRITIQUES NEEDED in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
@esther-c @ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @loopylin @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @raxforge @rae @freed_and_redeemed @hybridlore @elishavet-pidyon @koshka @theducktator @theshadow @the_lost-journal @trailblazer @keilah-h @anyone-else-i’m-blanking
I’m doing something drastic.
Something crazy.
I suppose I shall start at the beginning…
Our youth…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 months, 2 weeks ago
@stephie
Oh yes, I’ll be praying! <3@theducktator
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
For some reason I thought of you IMMEDIATELY (probably because we’ve had so many conversations about slapping your writing on paper and NEVER GOING BACK (something that I struggle to not do since I’m a perfectionist lol))
It’s okay!!! I completely understand and I can’t even imagine how hard the past few weeks have been for…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you want some ideas or need a brainstorming partner just lmk!
I will!!! TYSM!!! 🙃
Yes I totally get it!! You definitely don’t have to go through and try to fix everything in the first draft 🥴
ahhhh hahaha yeah, I’d definitely get in trouble with @ellette-giselle if I did that…. (jk jk h…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Ohhhh my wordddd
Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.
Thanks for pointing that out!! <33
Glad I was able to help!!!!!
I do love your dialogue though…you’re so talented in that area!!! Just maybe breaking it up would help A LOT. Because too much o…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Rainbows, unicorns, and random questions in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 months, 2 weeks ago
I feel like it totally depends on the situation.
Though, at least for me, something doesn’t feel right about saying “your religion is wrong and false.” Because that tends to get people defensive and push them away from Jesus. I feel way more comfortable with saying “I believe that there is only one God….(etc…)” and just sharing what…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Ohhhh my wordddd
Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.
Thanks for pointing that out!! <33
Mmm. If that’s how other books do it, I guess it could work. I looked it up and some people say to extend the vowels and smooth con…
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Esther replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Mmmm…that does make sense, I’m just not sure how to do that.
Instead of “hope”, my characters are trying to fix their problems themselves. Which might be a “false hope”, but I don’t really see it as hope. I understand what you mean, I’m just not exactly sure how to do that.
Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you…[Read more]
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