Miriam K.

@savannah_grace2009

Sara Sara Sara Sara Sara Sara….

Girl this is literally so good and I wish I had gotten to it sooner!!!

I can tell you poured your heart into this and can see it on every page. I’m so glad you decided to go on with this. It has already impacted me in little ways in the short time I read it and I know God will use it to imp…[Read more]

@koshka

My warning wouldn’t be that it’s dark or violent, but that you don’t want to even accidentally imply it’s okay. You don’t want to give your reader an idea, or thought pattern they didn’t have, but you do want to reach for a kid who’s been there, or is there, and needs that lifeline. That they are loved, that they can make it with God’s he…

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@keilah-h

Arcane and Alder are good name switches! I like them. Also, are you going to keep the Payne and Pythonos references? I think you should; when you publish your book people will be like “oh, this is an expansion on that universe.”

I think I will keep the Payne/Pythonos. I agree, it would be cool!!!!

Thanks, they fit really well and I lik…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thank you so much!!!!

I fixed the spelling!! Thanks for catching that XD
I appreciate you so so SO much, girl <3

@koshka @ellette-giselle @hybridlore @theducktator @keilah-h @theshadow @anyone-else

Thank you everyone for your comments on the doc!!

The reason I haven’t added anything new is because I moved it all to Reedsy. Reedsy will professionally typeset it all, and have a more professional look to it, and I like Reedsy better for writing.

The point of…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thank you soooo much girl…

@theducktator

Really?? tysmmm that means a lot <3

@koshka

Yeah…I think mostly I need to write like two more pieces, and then it’s just editing the rest. So hopefully this is doable XDXD *hopefully**

I think I just need enthusiastic pep talking right now, but emailing would help a lot too!!!

@ellette-giselle

That’s totally fine!!! Just don’t let me give up lollll

That’s the main thing I’m…[Read more]

Also, this isn’t going to be a novel. More like a collection of works that intertwine somehow.

I mainly just need accountability, but I would love your guys’ thoughts because I want this to be GOOD!!! It is going to a silent auction after all hahahaha

SO please tear it apart as well XD

@stephie
Oh yes, I’ll be praying! <3

@theducktator
Yay!! Praise the Lord!!!

@ellette-giselle

For some reason I thought of you IMMEDIATELY (probably because we’ve had so many conversations about slapping your writing on paper and NEVER GOING BACK (something that I struggle to not do since I’m a perfectionist lol))

It’s okay!!! I completely understand and I can’t even imagine how hard the past few weeks have been for…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you want some ideas or need a brainstorming partner just lmk!

I will!!! TYSM!!! 🙃

Yes I totally get it!! You definitely don’t have to go through and try to fix everything in the first draft 🥴

ahhhh hahaha yeah, I’d definitely get in trouble with @ellette-giselle if I did that…. (jk jk h…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

Glad I was able to help!!!!!

I do love your dialogue though…you’re so talented in that area!!! Just maybe breaking it up would help A LOT. Because too much o…[Read more]

@stephie

I feel like it totally depends on the situation.

Though, at least for me, something doesn’t feel right about saying “your religion is wrong and false.” Because that tends to get people defensive and push them away from Jesus. I feel way more comfortable with saying “I believe that there is only one God….(etc…)” and just sharing what…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

@grcr

Mmm. If that’s how other books do it, I guess it could work. I looked it up and some people say to extend the vowels and smooth con…

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@savannah_grace2009

Mmmm…that does make sense, I’m just not sure how to do that.

Instead of “hope”, my characters are trying to fix their problems themselves. Which might be a “false hope”, but I don’t really see it as hope. I understand what you mean, I’m just not exactly sure how to do that.

Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I’m in Sunrise Peak as well!

Yeah, i guess so 🤷🏻‍♀️

@keilah-h @hybridlore

Thanks ladies!!

I’m kinda nervous to submit it, but idk why 🫣😂

@esther-c

Sorry I’m just now getting to this!!!!

My main critique would be that you spend a lot of time on dialogue. I kind of feel like we just got thrown into the story and all we know about the characters is because of what they say. Maybe breaking up some dialogue and really showing us who they characters are would help…it kind of feels l…[Read more]