TheArcaneAxiom

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@grcr

LOL I love these parts. 💛💛

Aww, thanks! 🥰 Me too 🤪

Would you want to write this differently… ? before I saw the “she drew out her name” part, my mind read it that she spelled it out. (Maybe I’m just crazy…?)

I don’t knowww 😭 I’ve seen it written like that in books before, but I feel like if I changed it to italics it would carry a differe…[Read more]

Bro, I was literally like smashing the submit button and it took forever for that response to post 🤦🏻‍♀️🤣

@savannah_grace2009

My story is not a lighthearted, hopeful story, at least in the beginning. Right now it’s supposed to be “depressing” and dark. Honestly, to add sprinkles of hope in wouldn’t work for what’s going to happen in the next few chapters. Because right now, none of my characters know God, and so without God there is no hope. I want to…

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@esther-c

I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3

@rae

That was so good!!! I’m so worried about Baron now. 😢 He can’t die; I like him too much!

@esther-c

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…

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@keilah-h

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳  Nice lizard! How old are you now?

@theducktator

*gasp* It’s a date!

Yes!! 🤭 In my first draft I actually never wrote a scene of their first study sesh together…do you think I should add that in for the second draft??

When what, Tyler? 👀 I want to know…

I would like to know as well… 🤣

Definitely left that open for the imagination or a future short story &#x1f44…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, so I told you I’d finish reading your book by the end of February, and I did! But I only started like two days ago. 🤣 Here are my thoughts! (Excuse any typos, I was doing this in the car, lol!)

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot…[Read more]

@rae

Probably Baron himself. I love Rya though; she’s adorable.

@rae

I just read through all of this and enjoyed it immensely. 😃 I love your characters so much!

@koshka

 Liko could get stuff done, right? The fellow certainly had enough hands.

*snorts*

@loopylin

Ooh, I like Terry. The problem with names from this era is that so many of them are taken by adults I know. XD

@keilah-h

Not that I hate that, but I don’t love it either. I want them to just beat the bad guys already.

Exactly. I want it, but only as a subplot, not as the main thing.