TheArcaneAxiom

Actually, I think there was a point in the drafting or planning stage that lowkey forgot Brandon existed 💀🤦🏻‍♀️🤣

@theducktator

Awww, thank you so much girl!!! 💖 I appreciate you taking the time to read through it all! <33

Do you have any additional feedback after having read the whole thing?

@savannah_grace2009

No that’s really helpful! Tysm!!

@whalekeeper

That looks so good, I love how the face is so simple but clean, it looks like it belongs in a picture book.

@linus-smallprint

Oooh that’s a good idea!!

And I like your ideas too…I feel like that would be really cool if we did something like that

IT’S JULY 29TH AND COSTCO HAS IT’S CHRISTMAS DECORATIONS UP. 😭😭😭 WHYYYYYYY.

Now that I’m going back to the beginning…

This is really hard XD

because I know you’re trying to go for the “chaos” vibes of a big family as they get ready for church and the party. You set up Hallie, Easton, and the parents pretty well, especially for the fast-paced scene, but the other siblings kind of disappear throughout the book.

Maybe…[Read more]

@esther-c

To be honest, I’m not really sure.

I might have to reread it a little more and let you know XD

@esther-c

Antonio gently wiped away one of her tears with his thumb. “Please don’t cry. I like it much better when I can see your eyes sparkle naturally.”

*squeals* OH MY GOODNESS.

I loved this book!  The scenes when Hallie is making up with her friends were so sweet!!!!!!!! I’m sad it’s over. I looked forward to the chapter dumps.…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ok thank you!!

I was thinking there needed to be more family interaction too. I’m glad you caught that. Is there a certain spot on the book that you think those types of scenes would fit best? (If not, that’s fine)

Ok yes!! I will for sure do that! It will be fun for me to take time to flesh out the characters individually…[Read more]

@esther-c

I would just like to see it set up a little more at the very beginning chapters.

I know you’re going for chaos on the Sunday morning before church, but like I mentioned before, since Easton and Hallie’s family is a big one, I think you need to focus more on their family and the dynamics. I’d love to see Hallie’s closeness with her mom…[Read more]

@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Thank you girls so much for reading through my book and supporting me!! 💕💕 I so so so appreciate you! ❤️

Your comments have given me a lot more confidence in the plot and characters, which I definitely needed going into a third draft.

Are there any scenes you’d like to see added? Or characters you’d like to see mor…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! you’re the best and I always love exchanging ideas with you <3

I LOVE LITTLE HALLIE

@esther-c

yeah, Cars and Phones BROKE ME

Last week my mom was at Mayo Clinic in Rochester doing more cancer treatments, which was hard since it wasn’t planned. I guess even if it was, it would be hard since she was gone for over a week and me and my siblings and my dad were all missing her a lot and attempting to keep our house from going out of…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

DON’T YOU DARE. *hides Evan*

@ellette-giselle

Characters:

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

I thought all of them were. I guess Jonathan would be most interesting though.

~ Were there any character that need to be more engaging? If so, how would be some good ways for me to do that?

I always forget about Brian. He should…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Nice! You hyphenated firstborn though, which is one word.

@rae

I’m glad you had fun! HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!🥳🥳🥳

@hybridlore

I filled out your feedback form!