TheArcaneAxiom

@savannah_grace2009

Critique for chapter 7:

Really strong chapter! It really shows Lilitu’s struggles, which is something I don’t really remember from previous drafts. Like everyone else is saying, I like how you’re making Cassian a bigger character this time.

My only question would be, how did Lilitu survive? It seems like the Aquinos were…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I missed that you preferred younger characters. You can skip Nicholas if you want.

@theducktator

I look at maps whenever a place is mentioned XD

And because maps are just cool!!! lol

@theducktator

I don’t look at them often. I usually look a couple times in the process of reading to get an idea of where everything is, but I don’t look at them frequently, so a lot if the tine, I don’t know where things are happening.

I told him only nerds use the maps. He said only nerds read fantasy novels. Touché. 😂

@keilah-h

Tumors? lol

@ellette-giselle @anyone-else

Next chapter…be warned…this one is a little *coughs* sad…and dark and it deals with a really sad reality in our world. So continue reading at your own risk.

Chapter 8

Sticks and Stones

Sef cowered before the large man, blinking back tears.

She wanted to scream with frustration. She had been late again!

She…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yeah, I was wondering if that was the case! Glad I was able to help!!! 😊

Yes! I love how easy it is to share chapters!

Yeah it took me FOREVER to figure out how to use it, but after over a year of using it I have never ever wanted to go back!

This is the language we came up with…kind of:

All the consonants you gave:

t l n m r k s p sh b f v z d j g w th

Vowels:

let’s just say it’s English vowels for now.

These are the “swears” we came up with:
Scist (Scisto)

Dissar (Dissaros)

And idk what else…XD

@thearcaneaxiom

hahaha

okay

let me go back real quick then…

@thearcaneaxiom

Okay, Tlavian it is! XD why are you so good at this!?!?!

@ellette-giselle

I actually do show a scene of the kids working in the next chapter, and then a couple chapters after that…just wait XD

Okay, good ideas!

I just don’t know how to reveal it all…because those ideas sound so good but when I try to do stuff like that it feels either rushed or too slow 😭😭😭 I’ll figure it out somehow lol

And…[Read more]

@rae

The ducklings are SO CUTE!!!!!😍

@rae

It’s so sad. 😭

@rae

Tomoko is so good!

@rae

The librarian actually knew exactly what book I needed. It’s called the Anarchist’s Cookbook.

@ellette-giselle

Thank you sooo much, do you have any thoughts/ comments??? I’d love to hear them!

@thearcaneaxiom

Okay great!!!

I guess some of both? Like what the Andromedans would call Him, as well as new names for what the humans could call Him?

@linus-smallprint

Oooh! You use Reedsy too?!?!

I’M NOT THE ONLY ONE!!!
How do you like it??