TheArcaneAxiom

@jonas @ellette-giselle

Chapter 8

Monster

What am I doing?

Frustration built up in Lilitu’s chest until he wanted to scream.

But he couldn’t scream….or else Adar would find him.

Cass isn’t going to come bail you out this time, he pressed his lips together in a thin line. You have to figure it out yourself.

He tried to find a comfort…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ummmmmm

There’s more sad where that came from

heh…heh…

@jonas

Okay, I’ll have Cassian say something XD it will probably trigger Lilitu’s temper though lol

Yeah…it is…

Don’t worry you guys, I’m not just being dark to be dark, there is a purpose behind it!!!! Just wait haha

@savannah_grace2009

Critique for chapter 7:

Really strong chapter! It really shows Lilitu’s struggles, which is something I don’t really remember from previous drafts. Like everyone else is saying, I like how you’re making Cassian a bigger character this time.

My only question would be, how did Lilitu survive? It seems like the Aquinos were…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I missed that you preferred younger characters. You can skip Nicholas if you want.

@theducktator

I look at maps whenever a place is mentioned XD

And because maps are just cool!!! lol

@theducktator

I don’t look at them often. I usually look a couple times in the process of reading to get an idea of where everything is, but I don’t look at them frequently, so a lot if the tine, I don’t know where things are happening.

I told him only nerds use the maps. He said only nerds read fantasy novels. Touché. 😂

@keilah-h

Tumors? lol

@ellette-giselle @anyone-else

Next chapter…be warned…this one is a little *coughs* sad…and dark and it deals with a really sad reality in our world. So continue reading at your own risk.

Chapter 8

Sticks and Stones

Sef cowered before the large man, blinking back tears.

She wanted to scream with frustration. She had been late again!

She…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yeah, I was wondering if that was the case! Glad I was able to help!!! 😊

Yes! I love how easy it is to share chapters!

Yeah it took me FOREVER to figure out how to use it, but after over a year of using it I have never ever wanted to go back!

This is the language we came up with…kind of:

All the consonants you gave:

t l n m r k s p sh b f v z d j g w th

Vowels:

let’s just say it’s English vowels for now.

These are the “swears” we came up with:
Scist (Scisto)

Dissar (Dissaros)

And idk what else…XD

@thearcaneaxiom

hahaha

okay

let me go back real quick then…

@thearcaneaxiom

Okay, Tlavian it is! XD why are you so good at this!?!?!

@ellette-giselle

I actually do show a scene of the kids working in the next chapter, and then a couple chapters after that…just wait XD

Okay, good ideas!

I just don’t know how to reveal it all…because those ideas sound so good but when I try to do stuff like that it feels either rushed or too slow 😭😭😭 I’ll figure it out somehow lol

And…[Read more]

@rae

The ducklings are SO CUTE!!!!!😍

@rae

It’s so sad. 😭

@rae

Tomoko is so good!

@rae

The librarian actually knew exactly what book I needed. It’s called the Anarchist’s Cookbook.

@ellette-giselle

Thank you sooo much, do you have any thoughts/ comments??? I’d love to hear them!