TheArcaneAxiom

@jonas

Hmm. Good question. I’m not exactly sure how to explain it, partly because I don’t understand it that well. But from what I understand, the Hook is what grabs the reader’s attention. Like in my story, for example, the “hook” would be when Neveah gives birth to Hanna. It disrupts Sef’s natural world, however, it doesn’t really force her to…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

🤣 Eloy and Cass are the perfect brothers! Please tag me if you write/post more!

Any member of the Diffi Cult found guilty of taking the easier and/or more straightforward path is subjected to…

….in caves in the mountains, along the streets, anywhere that makes surviving as hard as possible…

…practically incapable of taking any useful action. The Diffi Cultists live…

@acancello

This is all I’ve written in the next chapter:

The next morning, Lilitu walked out of his room, wearing actual clothes this time.

He stopped dead in his tracks when he saw Sef sleeping on the couch. Then all the memories from last night came rushing back. Why was she here? What had happened? Where were his parents?

Sef’s green hair f…

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@savannah_grace2009

The ones Rae gave you are really good! Have you written the next chapter yet? (I want to see how this ends 🙂 )

Yes, I have noticed this for a long time. I think that it takes you to the next page, which doesn’t exist yet, and is therefore empty.

@savannah_grace2009

 Hugo is so cute! I love him!!! (the ammount of times I’ve said that is concerning…)

Lol! Thank you!!

@savannah_grace2009

I’m not quite sure I get what the “First Plot Point” is and how it’s different from the “Hook.” It says that it “pushes the main character into the central conflict.” Isn’t that what a hook/inciting incident does?

@beth-torres

Idk, I guess KP is still being buggy.

@thearcaneaxiom

Yeah, that’s the main thing I haven’t figured out, the powers of the system. In some cases, I think it would be cool to have the benefit be related to the cost, like maybe sacrificing your ability to see color for better vision overall. But I’m not sure if that would work as a general principle. I’m not sure what the powers will be.

@jonas @highscribeofaetherium @thearcaneaxiom

Here’s my next chapter… if you have romance, LOOK AWAY lol!

Chapter 6: Raindrops

Lilitu was sitting on the steps, minding his own business, like any sensible person would do.

He was watching the wind sway the trees, listening to their whispers.

Often, he would sit and try to make sense of what…[Read more]

@rae

Lol!

@rae

Aww! So sweet!

@acancello

“Kiss for motivation?”

“In your dreams Walton.”

She roughly grabbed Hugo by the neck of his shirt and began to drag him towards the building, “Let’s get going!”

I love that!!! Hugo is so cute! I love him!!! (the ammount of times I’ve said that is concerning…)

@esther-c

Okay, yeah I get that. Naming chapters is hard!!!

Livia

“Yeah,” Liv agreed, “though that might not stop Xandro from going to Lukas.”

“Oh, dear,” Callie laughed.

“Is this the store?” Livia asked.

“Yep!” Callista said, and the three of them entered the store.

“I just hope they don’t have any restrictions on horses, because that might be a problem,” Liv whispered.

@thearcaneaxiom

Okay, I don’t know what I was thinking last night. Let me think through this again. Let’s say you sacrifice the thing you value most. The power you got must now be the thing you value most, because otherwise you wouldn’t have done it. So if you sacrifice that power, you must get something better than that, so that would just le…[Read more]

In this scene they are trying to break into a giant facility to save their family’s. Hugo being his annoying self, lol!

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“Now are you ready?” Hugo asked impatiently, testing the strength of the handcuffs.

She hesitated, “Yes, I think we are.”

“Kiss for motivation?”

“In your dreams Walton.”

She roughly grabbed Hugo by the neck of his…[Read more]