TheArcaneAxiom

@jonas

Sorry, Dalton has been taken by the protection squad, where he will be supplied with copious amounts of tea and therapy.

@hybridlore

I feel like the ending is very abrupt, almost. I know it’s meant to be a cliffhanger but it sort of feels like you cut the ending off. Then again, some books are like this so as long as there’s a second book I don’t think it’s a big problem.

I agree, the ending is abrupt, but I’m not sure how to make it any less so. It just kinda m…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I agree with @hybridlore (although I only skimmed it), the end seems abrupt. It almost feels like you’re stopping before the climax and resolution. Otherwise, looks good!

@rae

(his story is a salvation story… One that sometimes makes me cry).

I’ve never written something that makes me cry…But then again I don’t usually cry reading anything.

Ah, yes, perfect! I just recalled my most tortured character! (I feel a bit guilty for not thinking of him earlier, considering how tortured he is XD)

Dalton Percaro (pronounced “Dal-tun Per-care-o. It’s an Arvendin name, so it isn’t pronounced the same as the English name Dalton.)

Dalton is around 17 years old,  5’ 10”ish, has brown eyes, and d…[Read more]

@rae

Weird. I’ve always pronounced it “Nay-him.” The only problem with that spelling is that it’s a bit inconsistent since you spell Nayhelm with a y. I especially notice it since they’re in the same name, but it’s fine, since it would be a different alphabet anyway. If you spelled it “Nahelm” it would look like it might be pronounced “Nah…[Read more]

@rae

“Nay-him” is a perfectly valid pronunciation since you’re not using Arabic linguistics. I agree that the y would look bad.

@keilah-h

The asteroid belt in our solar system is also thought to be the remains of a planet, I think.

@rae

From what I know of how Arabic languages sound, I would think it would be pronounced “Nah-heem” or something like that, rather than “Nay-him.”

You, not out. Idk how I did that.

@rae

What I’ve learned is that pretty much anything out can imagine is a name in some language 😅

@keilah-h

There’s a good number of characters that have normal names too: Hugo, Carrie, Kari, etc. Ellis is also a real name, though not common these days.

@esther-c

Which group of characters are yours approaching right now?

Those two… 🤣

@freedomwriter76

Alrighty! Here it is! (:

Everton

Ev woke with a start. His vision blurred and unblurred until he could finally see clearly. His eyes glanced over the stone walls and the flickering sconces.

Oh… this place again… He had been here before. Wasn’t sure how it had happened, but here he was in this wild castle again.

He mutte…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Sure! Sounds good! I’ll get to writing their first RP later this afternoon, but feel free to do one before me. (:

@freedomwriter76

Aww 😢 Poor boi. He needs hugs. 🥺

@loopylin

Oh my word, I love that. 🤣

@thearcaneaxiom @freedomwriter76

UVAH

She walked forward in a daze as Bucky ushered them into a dim room to hide. As Uvah turned back towards the door however, her gaze caught on Bucky’s arm, illuminated for only a second as he shut the entrance. Left in darkness, she could only barely see the slice of dripping red running along his bicep, she…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Yeah, I don’t really mind either way. I have no idea where we left off either 😅