TheArcaneAxiom

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Chapter 11

Wolves

“Sef?”

Sef looked up from sweeping the floor, and saw Neveah standing in the doorway.

“What is it?”

“We’re forgetting something,” Neveah smiled wryly.

“Forgetting something?” Sef repeated, confused.

“Yes. We’re forgetting to think of names for the child.”

A knot of anger grew in Sef’s stomach.

“We’re going to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yes

@ellette-giselle

All right! 🙂

@grcr

“If at first you don’t succeed, try doing it the way Mom told you to in the beginning.” 🤣🤣🤣

@jonas

This phrasing sounds a bit awkward.

I’m cringing…

WHYYY

apparently I didn’t edit it as well as I thought…

Ooops yeah I’ll fix that.

That’s a lot of “that”s.

NOOOO I’M CRINGING AGAIN

what was I thinking?!? I just committed a crime…to use the same word three times in a sentence…how could I?!?!

By this point, you’ve managed to conv…

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@ellette-giselle @whalekeeper

Thanks that makes me feel a little better!

And I know it’s weird that I’m only 14 and are writing about this kind of stuff…

And what’s even more strange is that I was never ever exposed to violence or horror movies or bad books as a young child. So at eight years old when I started writing about slavery and…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I have been reading the chapters you’ve been posting but I just haven’t really had any comments cuz I’m bad at critiquing :p they’re all really good, though.

I can’t say I agree with Keilah, either.

@savannah_grace2009

Okay, here we go for chapter 7.

too unfortunate to get out of their path.

This phrasing sounds a bit awkward. I had to parse through it in my head for a second to get it. Something like “unfortunate enough to be in their path” might work a bit better.

that that cart that was now a pile of ashes, could have been him.

That’s a…[Read more]

Y’all…I have to hurry up and post the next chapters so you don’t think I’m just a psychopath teenager…

heh..heh…

Chapter 9

Strange Magic

Lilitu stood at the edge of Farnbron Brook, trying—and failing— not to gag.

The smell was especially bad tonight.

It was always worse during the warmer months, and now it was the middle of sum…[Read more]

@keilah-h

If you don’t mind me asking, are you over 16??

Ummmmmm

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I’m 14 and don’t turn 15 until September

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I hope I’m correct in assuming that the book will be 16+ as well because oof……that may be the darkest thing I’ve ever seen on this site……

I don’t think I’m going to have it be 16+, more like 14+ since that’s how ol…[Read more]

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@ellette-giselle

I wouldn’t mind helping if you need it! Though I’ve never written out a full blurb before

@rae @keilah-h @theshadow @princesachronicle22

Who all is still back at the cabins? Both of my couples stayed behind.

@ellette-giselle

Would Crystal’s skirt be a wrap skirt, or a practice tutu? You can choose whether or not to do Nicholas, whichever you prefer. 🙂

@freed_and_redeemed

Yay!! I love it!!

@ellette-giselle

That’s sooo awesome!! I love the art!! I’d recommend softening the word color though, the black is a really sharp contrast with the pale cover, but I think it’s amazing!

@theducktator

I think it should be done however enhances your reading experience, but I prefer to look at the map for a while appreciate the art a little, then hope it will help my mental geography during the book but really knowing that when I look back at it later I was completely off…

😂😅

@ellette-giselle

That happens to me a lot.

*considers what characters I should have drawn next…*

@ellette-giselle

I’ll try my best to read through your WIP, but I can’t make any promises since I’m also helping two other people with their stories. (: