Potato reporter

@the_lost-journal lolllll is he French?

@esther-c true, true. Standard Americans don’t have much of an accent. You’ve got the southerners, and a couple of the New York/Massachusetts people have got something, but the vast majority of us, nothin’.

@the_lost-journal

I’m tagging you too since you said you may have been able to participate.

@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint @whalekeeper @the_lost-journal @keilah-h

I rewrote the first chapter with all of your suggestions in mind, do you want me to post it for your thoughts/critiques?

@the_lost-journal @hybridlore

I think me and shadow are the only people on here who write anything creepy… 😂

You’re not the only ones. My Lovedream project is sci-fi fantasy mixed with horror, or something like that.

@theshadow

I’m following along! And I’ll answer any group questions you post; for now, I’ll stay quiet. *Ninja reads*

@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty

Okay, here’s the next chapter. Any critiques/thoughts would be appreciated.

Chapter 2

It was quiet. Extraordinarily quiet. The clock did not tick on Elina’s wall, the alarm on her phone did not blare, and her siblings did not come to wake her up. The only noise came from Elina h…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal that’s cool!

@the_lost-journal Nope! Just curious, no debt nor blackmail I know of. The only emperor I know cares nothing for potatoes, nor is his name Shadow.

@the_lost-journal

Sorry I’m late in getting back to you.

Yeah, that was a creepy story. I don’t have too much to say about it—I agree with Linus about the pacing. I, too, like your use of repetition here. 😊

in my reached up to my ears, to feel them blood… leaking out of them…

I think I get what you’re saying here, but I had a bit of a hard time…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal Don’t worry, I’m not working for an evil overlord lol

nope, just wanted to know. But I’m ok if it’s a secret.

@the_lost-journal where you got the potato pictures.

@the_lost-journal

You’re welcome!

@the_lost-journal

Sorry I took a while to get back to you.

Of the projects you shared, The Kingdom of Kaimor sounds the most interesting to me. (Like Keilah, I like animal-hybrid races) Horror/Thrillars aren’t my thing, so A Cellar’s tales and P.I.-C.A.F.E are probably the least appealing. I did read that bit of A Cellar’s tales that you sha…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Super creepy, but interesting! Is this the entirety of the story, or is there going to be more? Either way, the mystery remains effective: if there’s more, than this is effective for piquing the reader’s interesting; if not, the questions it leaves unanswered are intriguing in and of themselves. I also liked your use of repetition.

@the_lost-journal

The rules are that you write at least 500 words, and when the deadline day comes, you post your story here.

Micah 7:8 Do not rejoice over me, my enemy; when I fall, I will arise. When I sit in darkness, the Lord WILL be a light to me.

No idea what that means…

Perhaps, I can share why I love this verse so much:

This verse is Is…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

OMG!!!!

Richarded

I did not mean that! I MEANT TO PUT RICHARD!!!!!

NOT THE OTHER THING

@theshadow lol they’re nothing like each other but hey, that works.

@the_lost-journal funny enough I don’t find those guy names ugly.

They make me think of grumpy old men, but not necessarily in an “ugly” kinda way.

@the_lost-journal awww that’s cute!

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @hybridlore @the_lost-journal

Okay, well here’s the first chapter. I’m not a huge fan of it, but the other draft first chapter wasn’t great either. So critiques are definitely appreciated.

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?”

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you intend to?”
“I…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thanks, it’ll be a little creepy, though it’s not the main focus.

@keilah-h

Lol thank you.

@the_lost-journal

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