Sunny421

@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12
Zlatan

The bay of a war dog. One small mark on time. Instant chaos in the ranks.

Hateful chaos and disorder.

The Desanik in Zlatan took over.

The tower door had been cleared, their paths somehow traced. By the sound at least half a dozen guards were already inside.

No time left.…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Sounds good! I love it!

Yeah, that makes sense. I hoped it would help separate. Poor Nyx. And Arabella.

There are times I think she, Viktor, and/or Alyona could have a nice long talk…

And now Alyona is running to the roof… Or not. We’ll see.

If she didn’t, Viktor’s gonna be furious with worry.

I love him.

Soooo….

I more than started getting ready for the guards to attack. 😬 XD

@freedomwriter76 @koshka @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12

The groups sound pretty good, Alyona and Lynn would be rather fun, one they get to know each other. Alyona is quiet, but she isn’t exactly timid. Outgoing natures remind her of her little sister, and she’s happy with that.

Alyona would be interesting with anyone, although she may have to open up…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @koshka @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12

*Comes flying into the tower window*

I’m back!!!!

*Lands in a crouch, cloak slid over one shoulder, green wool against a blue linen kirtle. Soft fabric on stone*

Because we can do all things in our imaginations. (Including owning said 10th century garb. *Sigh*)

Anyway, I have returned from my…[Read more]

@queen_of_alvastia

As far as edits go, it was confusing which character you were speaking for as the POV switches around. Are you writing omniscient view?

@queen_of_alvastia

Is he okay?

IS HE?!

I need to knoooow!!!!!!

@queen_of_alvastia

*Quiet voice in corner*

What just happened?

@queen_of_alvastia

Um, what just happened?! O.O

That was interesting, and it definitely had me hooked while reading it. I’ll have to think over any edits etc., but for now, that’s pretty good.

@freedomwriter76

@godlyfantasy12

Thanks, y’all! You’re really encouraging, and I’m glad you like it!

Yes, she is a bit hopeless, she knows deep in her heart that she’s headed for spiritual bankruptcy, but she’s seen so much already that she’s almost dead inside. It has a lot to do with the certain kind of things she’s involved in. Nasty, ugly…[Read more]

So, for tags! (Let’s see if I can remember them.) If I didn’t tag you, don’t feel like you can’t say anything, or if you know if someone who might like to help, then feel free to take them.

@freedomwriter76 @koshka @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 @joy-caroline @power @ANYBODY

@godlyfantasy12

You’re welcome! This is my favorite type of book research too, so thank you!

@lydia-s

Ooooooooooooooo! Like it is said above, this is ingenious!

Ok, so I will probably be on here a lot….

This picture, if it goes through, is actually of a chapel in the underground cities created by soldiers in the trenches in France during WWI.

@godlyfantasy12

Okkaaayyyy…*drags self back from hospital reports*

It looks like the wound is somewhat chronic, frozen in the stages just after bleeding, where the skin is sealed somewhat, but the wound is still open while no longer bleeding. which would make sense if it is painful from time to time. The magic would have to come in here as the…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Eewwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.

I quote Viktor.

Did they just…

kiss?

*retches into trash can*

Just teasing. 😉 Although that was my reaction to the last little bit, especially the last sentence, there were a lot of reactions packed into that scene. It got rather tense.

And I love the dialogue! And that Ezra took the bullet for…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Ooo, wonderful tension! The things authors love to create yet struggle to write.

It sounds good so far; the emotions seem balanced to me.

How would Ara respond to November being hurt? How did she want to respond to Riven?

At this point it looks like she’s about to explode, which could manifest itself in various ways depending…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

I’ll need to check this, but it sounds like the wounds close up, but be scar tissue grows. Anyway I’ll be back on here once I’ve done some research.

@lydia-s

Ooo, here’s one I found recently.

@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12

Vulkasin

Loud voices. The beginning of an argument. Shuffling feet on cold stone.

The barrack…

Something was digging into his side. Vulkasin tried rolling over, but the thing followed his movement. He finally forced open one eye.

The cross piece and pommel on his sword.

Why did I…[Read more]