Stepheroni and Cheese

@stephie yesss that happens too sometimes, but less commonly.

also cool Italian writing on your signature. My mom loves that language.

@hybridlore thanks!! I guess my parents didn’t have great relationships with their siblings until they were all older so they were like “you guys should learn to like each other young so you’ll have each…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

This will answer your question about the feedback I’m looking for.

@ellette-giselle @theducktator @keilah-h @stephie @loopylin @theshadow

I made up a feedback file with questions I would like you to answer about my book. Do you have to? No. I understand if it’s too much and if you don’t have enough time, but I would really…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Here is the discussion guide. It’s rought right now. It was inspired by the discussion guides at the end of the second edition books for The Wingfeather Saga. However, I think that’s resulted in it being written for a younger audience than my book is aimed at (I’m…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

End credits song! (This was the most fitting version of this song I could find. As an aside, if you haven’t, look up the history of this song.)

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Happy Boxing Day! (do you celebrate this in the USA?) Let’s box this draft up with the final chapter!

Chapter the 34th – The Choice

There is one more thing I need to write for this that I will do later. A discussion guide for the reader. After that I will have…[Read more]

@keilah-h @stephie

(also, how come humans aren’t a little more upset that lyens seem to think they’re the dominant species? Is there a human-centric country or are they just all over without a specific homeland?) 

Yes, the humans are upset, this just hasn’t been the focus of the story, and with other things to focus on, such as getting rid of the…[Read more]

@stephie

What language is your forum signature?

@stephie

Pff 🤪

@keilah-h

And that’s not all, you’re also riding a flying broomstick and trying to avoid two perpetually active dodgeballs.

@stephie

Eek I ranted sorry.

No worries. I rant all the time, just ask @ellette-giselle.

Thank you both for your feedback on the emotional scene. Heh heh. Maybe one day I will learn how to make my characters emotional, but your advice will help me, thanks for it. Where would the both of you say the emotion fell off in the chapter? Was it around…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint   @stephie    @liberty     @hybridlore      @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr    @loopylin    @freed_and_redeemed    @mineralizedwritings    @grcr

Here’s the movie balled. Oh the music! It was amazing!!!

This is a story I can stand behind concerning women fighting. She fought when she was defending women and…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint   @stephie    @liberty     @hybridlore      @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr    @loopylin    @freed_and_redeemed    @mineralizedwritings    @grcr

HAS ANYONE SEEN THIS!!!!!????

It was amazing!!!! I saw it in theaters with friends and am now trying to scrape together the money to take my family! It was AMAZIN…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Merry Christmas!!!

Oh I saw that coming! This is good, Linus. I do have one complaint.

 

This is an emotional moment, but I don’t see much emotion in Alan’s prayer.

I would suggest pausing in between fragments of prayer and describing what Alan is doing and feeling in that moment.

Exactly. This was just what I was thi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Next chapter.

Chapter the 33rd – The Father

I’ll see you after Christmas with the final chapter! Merry Christmas to you all!

@stephie you asked about my reasons for obsessing over the Australian continent and all it has to offer?

well, it all started when I was four. I had a Leapfrog video game console thingy and one of the games my parents bought me for it was a “world exploration” kinda game. You were supposed to be helping two pilots circumnavigate the globe, and…[Read more]

@theducktator haha!

yeah I love it.

@stephie yessss Italian food rules

I’m curious about the Australia story.

I’ll tell you all about that, but I’ll do it in the Chat Chat so we don’t take up Linus’s forum space lol

@stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Messed up the last link. The correct one is in my previous post on here.

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Here we go. Are you ready?

Chapter the 30th – The Cost

I think you can tell what direction I’m going with this, but I want to hear your thoughts before we see what Alan does. What do you think Alan should do and why?

@stephie

Forgot to return here.

The last chapter I wrote was 2,546 words long, so I think I got through all those snowballs.

Now I have 20. What to do with them?

Throws 4 at each of the following:
@theducktator
@grcr
@highscribeofaetherium
@savannah_grace2009
@theshadow

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Next chapter. 30 chapters now. Wow.

Chapter the 30th – The Regretful

Also, of those of you who found spell images disturbing, there will be no more descriptions of them for the remained of this book. So you can continue reading without have to worry about that.

@stephie

Stupendous points! Those are things I’ve thought about with a shudder. Some of our soldiers captured in Afghanistan were women. In one situation, she was the only one to survive because the medical staff of the place didn’t want to see her die.

Our Marine grandfather told my mother that she’d enlist “over his dead body.” Meanwhile, a…[Read more]