Stepheroni and Cheese

@stephie

Eek I ranted sorry.

No worries. I rant all the time, just ask @ellette-giselle.

Thank you both for your feedback on the emotional scene. Heh heh. Maybe one day I will learn how to make my characters emotional, but your advice will help me, thanks for it. Where would the both of you say the emotion fell off in the chapter? Was it around…[Read more]

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Here’s the movie balled. Oh the music! It was amazing!!!

This is a story I can stand behind concerning women fighting. She fought when she was defending women and…[Read more]

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HAS ANYONE SEEN THIS!!!!!????

It was amazing!!!! I saw it in theaters with friends and am now trying to scrape together the money to take my family! It was AMAZIN…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Merry Christmas!!!

Oh I saw that coming! This is good, Linus. I do have one complaint.

 

This is an emotional moment, but I don’t see much emotion in Alan’s prayer.

I would suggest pausing in between fragments of prayer and describing what Alan is doing and feeling in that moment.

Exactly. This was just what I was thi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Next chapter.

Chapter the 33rd – The Father

I’ll see you after Christmas with the final chapter! Merry Christmas to you all!

@stephie you asked about my reasons for obsessing over the Australian continent and all it has to offer?

well, it all started when I was four. I had a Leapfrog video game console thingy and one of the games my parents bought me for it was a “world exploration” kinda game. You were supposed to be helping two pilots circumnavigate the globe, and…[Read more]

@theducktator haha!

yeah I love it.

@stephie yessss Italian food rules

I’m curious about the Australia story.

I’ll tell you all about that, but I’ll do it in the Chat Chat so we don’t take up Linus’s forum space lol

@stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Messed up the last link. The correct one is in my previous post on here.

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Here we go. Are you ready?

Chapter the 30th – The Cost

I think you can tell what direction I’m going with this, but I want to hear your thoughts before we see what Alan does. What do you think Alan should do and why?

@stephie

Forgot to return here.

The last chapter I wrote was 2,546 words long, so I think I got through all those snowballs.

Now I have 20. What to do with them?

Throws 4 at each of the following:
@theducktator
@grcr
@highscribeofaetherium
@savannah_grace2009
@theshadow

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Next chapter. 30 chapters now. Wow.

Chapter the 30th – The Regretful

Also, of those of you who found spell images disturbing, there will be no more descriptions of them for the remained of this book. So you can continue reading without have to worry about that.

@stephie

Stupendous points! Those are things I’ve thought about with a shudder. Some of our soldiers captured in Afghanistan were women. In one situation, she was the only one to survive because the medical staff of the place didn’t want to see her die.

Our Marine grandfather told my mother that she’d enlist “over his dead body.” Meanwhile, a…[Read more]

@stephie

Yes! These are just what I have running through my mind and never put on paper!

My dad was in the military and is now in law enforcement and one thing he always says is, “When I get shot, I’d rather have A guy carry me out then a woman try to drag me out and end up getting us both killed.” He’s a very tall, muscular guy, and I honestly…[Read more]

@stephie

Very good practical points. I had a very similar discussion with my dad about two hours ago. 👍

@stephie

No you are not 😛

@stephie

Well, I’m glad to find someone who does agree. It’s a lonely stance.

Hopefully anything I said was helpful!

@keilah-h

honestly I think something like that actually exactly what @stephie was going for. The guy either doesn’t know any better or is something of a coward, and the girl is forced to lead because of it.

Off topic: I wonder if I’ll get an email if I tag myself. @stephie

Anyways, yes, that was what I was going for. There are a few sit…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle I mean, I DID say that was the exception as opposed to the rule, so if you’re trying to counter my argument, we’re actually kinda saying the same thing.

but honestly I think something like that actually exactly what @stephie was going for. The guy either doesn’t know any better or is something of a coward, and the girl is forced…[Read more]

@stephie

Okay. I’ll be working on that right away. I did get called into work unexpectedly today, so it will take longer than I was hoping, but I hopefully will post the next chapter soon.

@stephie

I also really want another chapter from Linus.

Of TNPT or the boy stranded on the island story I’ve been putting on this forum?

@ellette-giselle

How did you get Mark Rober on your side?