Stepheroni and Cheese

@ellette-giselle

Is a POV blind spot bad?

Nah, not really. Depends on how you handle it. Females are 50% of the population and many of them must be firstborns. We know very little about them. It’s a world building thing, and you’ve had to choose where to spend your effort, so it’s not surprising you haven’t included them.

If you wanted to, all…[Read more]

@theshadow

Yeah, it’s pretty cool!

And if you don’t enjoy rock, that’s fine. Sometimes certain genres bothers a person and they don’t know why. It’s just a fact of their life. Many country songs rub me off the wrong way, and I don’t know why. 🤷‍♀️

You might have to explain what that thing is though XD.

Synesthesia? That’s where a person has de…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

*Cries in a corner*

I do like how in this book, we’re getting to see the perspective of one of the soldiers.

True.

It is also true, I forgot. We only have one female character so far. Other than what I call “extras.” And she isn’t from the city, so we have a POV blind spot, so to speak.

If you don’t think it’s a comparable scenario, I’d be curious to know why.

@linus-smallprint

I’m not going to dig myself too far into this convo. But the way I see it, the government is torturing the inhabitants of the city. They’re literally killing kids. So… I don’t know what to say, other than to pose the same situation in front of you and ask you what you would do. There’s no peaceful way to deal with this, and…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I know you already have a bunch of people, but if you need another, I can help too!

@hybridlore

Once the others email me back, I’ll see if I have any more nagging questions or things that stump me that I might need your help with haha

I already have your email soooo I’ll just email you when I’m ready!!!

@ellette-giselle

*facepalm* Right.

@ellette-giselle

I was telling my (aspiring pilot) brother about this book and he brought up a good point. The US Air Force has trackers on all of their planes. Why would this government, with all its advanced technology, not have a way to track the Wraith?

@keilah-h

XD It means the message got into his inbox. I think. Normally, all the moderators have something like @kingdompen.org for their email addresses, and that address does not work. Deus Lamb, however, is part of Story Embers and has another address.

@keilah-h

Yeah I know. I’m the kind of person who tries something over and over, even when it’s hopeless.

@everyone

I messaged Deus Lamb, and I did not get a “returned to sender”! I’m waiting to see if he’ll respond.

@linus-smallprint

What do you all think?

Depends on how time consuming this project is for you! If it takes lots of effort, I think we should go through all possible communications with the moderators. That way, you don’t do all of this just for KP to work anyway. But if it isn’t hard, go for it!

I’mma crash out

I’m going to keep trying this until it works.

I think Leo belongs with an experienced couple, not to mention Jonathan and Amber have only just reached friendship status. But besides that, I wipe my hands of any predictions.

@grcr

Oh no! Praying. 🩷