Sarah Spradlin

@kate-flournoy @daeus 708. A slow start as it is a new story, so I had some working out to do, but it began to move along as time went by.

@Daeus awesome. Finished the book yet?

I like it! 😀 Only thing I would look out for is adjectives in the first sentence— I am so one to talk, but thrilling and inspiring are pretty similar so I would cut one or the other.

@Daeus @bluejay 904 words, which I consider pretty good for editing. What did you guys get?

@adry_grace I agree with @Daeus. There would have to be something important beyond the art for one to risk there life. As much as I love my nation, I’m not going to risk almost certain death simply to save a historical document like the Declaration of Independence or raise a fallen flag. Now, if it served a greater purpose, like rallying the…[Read more]

@bluejay yes, roughly. 🙂

9:30 is in roughly 35 minutes?? @daeus @kate-flournoy. Cause I can continue that long.

@Daeus @bluejay me too! Till 9:30?

‘The girl was just sitting there— legs dangling over the edge of the bridge, slumped dejectedly beneath the weight of a soggy black hoodie.
Cobalt scratched his nose. Not the safest of places to sit. Maybe she was lost. Tugging lightly on his draggled, jewel-toned scarf, he got up from his bench and crossed to her side of the bridge. “Hey,” he…[Read more]

Woohoo! @daeus. I can write now. 🙂

Yes, @Adry_Grace! Very good point.

A few quick things I love about this short— one, the body language is amazing.
Two, the structure is perfect. We open with a bored musician obviously waiting for someone to come along and make his effort worthwhile— something instantly wanted. Enter little girl with coin; want becomes must have. The stakes…[Read more]

‘One… two… three… my tongue lolled nervously out between my jaws, and I crouched lower in the gutter. Not a very nice place to be, granted… but I was desperate.
There it was. Right across the street. Taunting me. Drawing me on to my certain demise.
I whined deep in my throat, choking on my tongue and slapping it up juicily around my teeth.…[Read more]

@Hope phewfk… that would just kill me.

Good example from Lysbeth— I hadn’t remembered that. And I agree one hundred percent with your conclusions.

Which sadly means this topic is nearing its demise.

Noooooo!!!!!! Someone do something! *hysterical panting* I don’t want to stop talking about deep things!!!

Welcome @hannah-olsen! I just saw this post…I’m not on here quite as much as I should be. Trying to get writing done and things like that. Once one gets on this forum, they can keep going for quite a while and forget the time. 😉

Anyway, I love writing fantasy, mainly. And I’m not sure what there is to say that no one else has said. But a late…[Read more]

And now for the weighter topics.

I agree with you, @Daeus, about never being sure what will happen. I read a book where a man was going to be starved to death. His wife had the plague, or something like that, so she came to see him, knowing she was contagious and figuring he’d die quickly that way. He did die a day or two later, but around the…[Read more]

And I love the video clip…that short was hilarious. 😉

Don’t turn green yet, @kate-flournoy. E doesn’t kill D. That would simply be too tragic (as if what I have in store isn’t) and it doesn’t go with the plot line. But I may use this dilemma in my seven book series I’m planning. Whenever I get a good idea and I don’t know where to put it, I stash it over in my seven book series. I’ll have more…[Read more]

Yes it is, @bluejay— Pixar’s ‘Lifted’. It’s absolutely hysterical.