Brianne

Ok, I read them both. The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning chapter. That’s all I have for now, I will go over it more later today if I have time!

@grcr

Ohh! I never thought of that before!!!

That makes a lot of sense, actually.

Maybe I could go something like this:

1. Prologue

2. Memory (chapter 15 of the second link, shows Sef and Neveah picking flowers with Hanna)

3. Nothing (go to Lilitu and Livia)

4. Stolen (where Sef and Neveah get seperated)

@hybridlore

I will definitely think about all this! I need to get more opinions before I make a decision…I am just so new to all this and want to see what more people think.

It’s a neat idea with the time change or whatever, I just don’t want it to be too confusing, and/or abrupt, you know?

@acancello

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement…

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@savannah_grace2009

This is supposed to say “feel free to tag me in any post”…so yeah…XD

Dont worry, I understood XD I make errors like that all the time 😂

@savannah_grace2009

Hey! I think the first one does a great job of pulling the reader in more, but the second one also has some great writing in it.

I know the chapter with Sef and her mom really means a lot to you, and it does a good job of setting up the backstory of Sef’s parents and a little bit of world building. So really they both work in…[Read more]

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement is so sweet 🥰

@acancello

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel.

Wait…really???!?!?! Aww thanks that means so much to me!!! I am excited for your feedback!! AND I CAN’T WAIT FOR MORE HUGO!!! lol

Also, feel free to tag you in any post w…

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@savannah_grace2009

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel. I will defiantly look through your link and give my critique 🙂 And pretty soon I will be posting some of mine to get feedback, I’ll be sure to tag you 🙂

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium @rae @vinagirl @trailblazer @grcr @esther-c @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @acancello @hybridlore @anyone-else

Okay, guys. I need serious help. My novel is kind of going nowhere…because I don’t know which way to start it!!!

I have two beginnings for my story. One jumps straight into…[Read more]

@trailblazer

I really like this scene!!!

Some ideas for plot twists:

Maybe she apologizes to Albert or something?? And then realizes that she does like him? Or something happens with her and Chester? OR A NEW BOY MOVES TO TOWN!!

Sorry, all my ideas seem to be centered around romance….lol

@esther-c

Livia

She stood there for a moment. “Um…I’m not sure how to do this.”

“Yeah, me neither,” Lukas laughed a little, “I was kind of hoping you would know.”

“Well, I don’t.”

“Oh.”

“We should watch the other people, and maybe we’ll figure it out?” Liv raised an eyebrow, and Lukas nodded.

They studied Fynn and Callista for a good…[Read more]

The dancing has begun!

Hehehe…

Alright, I’ll write some RPs

@savannah_grace2009

Lukas

Lukas swallowed hard and faced Liv with an uncertain smile wobbling on his lips. “Well?” He held out his arms.

@rae (I said in here that Chase was dancing, but I don’t know what you decided to do)

Callista

She smiled, all tears dried, and met Fynn’s ey…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Oh that’s awesome! You can tell her I love her name. 😉

I was trying to choose between Clementine, Maisie, Hallie, and Dixie. It was close between Maisie and Hallie, but Hallie won. 😁

@whalekeeper

Nar

“So what kind of amazing things can you tell me about yourself?” Nar smiled, then laughed again as she often did.

“I’m a geek about doctoring, I know a little bit about machinery from an older brother. I…can fight, but only do it for protection. I like the color…” Pink rose in her cheeks. “Amber more than anything. I’m one…[Read more]

@rae

I cringe at you’re writing of the last rp, it really doesn’t sound like your style.

 
@criticizingrae
 
Yeah…apparently my brain was dead.
@rae

You should rewrite it.

 
@criticizingrae
Yeah, I think I shall. But probably not rn.
 
@everyone ignore my last rp.

@everyone

Thank you for your prayers! My ankle should be back to normal by next week. I had a rapid recovery to the point I went from barely walking on it at all to walking across our house in one day! Thank you all!

@whalekeeper

Hugo is sooooo sweet! At this point, I’m forcing Nar in no way to like him, she just like…taking on her own life rn.

Nar

“Would you like to practise with me?” Hugo gave a little twirl and held out his arms. Nar pulled her hair out of her pony tail, the red curls falling to around the end of her rib cage. She tapped her right toe…[Read more]

@esther-c

Hey, my little sister’s name is Hallie!! XD

@freedomwriter76 @jonas @rae

Sef

She flinched back at the man’s voice.

It reminded her of too much….

No. She would not think about Iver now….

Cowering back into the shadows, she hoped he wouldn’t notice her. Or ask her any questions.