Brianne

And to all who love Chase, I made this for him and I would like suggestions…

@freedomwriter76 @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @savannah_grace2009 @esther-c @scoutfinch180 @whoever-else

Meet the friend-turned-traitor from my WIP!

@savannah_grace2009

Fynn

He dropped his gaze to the floor and didn’t speak for a moment. “I’m not offended… I just…” He sighed, tossing his bangs out of his eyes with a flip of his head. “I guess I am a little… self-centered, am I?” He gave a quick chuckle. “I just don’t want to… to lose her…” he softly said the last part, but pasted on a smile…[Read more]

@jonas

Ok, that makes more sense. I was gonna ask, what frame of reference does it stop in motion, so the infinite inertia idea does kinda help. I’ll still have to ponder on how that works on the temporal aspect though.

@jonas

Interesting! I love the high contrast magic systems. Giving me Star Wars vibes actually with the light side and dark side users, and grey Jedi. Question on the positive temporal pulse. What does it mean for the object to be frozen in time, and therefore unmovable?

@keilah-h

Ru Eis

“Elves are common in the world I have just came from. Though, there is a world I know that they are only objects of fantasy.” Ru smiled again, fiddling nervously with her fingers. Despite her voice, there were signs upon her face that Ru was slightly shy. “Um, if you know, what’s the name of your home planet, Tech?”

(I’ve rewritten the beginning of my main WIP so many times. 🤣)

@savannah_grace2009

Okay! Yeah, I get that and I’ve been trying to work on that.

Awesome!

Okay so question-I’ve heard a lot of people (in videos on novel writing) say that you shouldn’t start with your character waking up to start their morning. So should I change how I start the story? I’d still have the same scene where Neveah tells Sef that sh…

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@esther-c

Livia

She thought for a moment. “I think I remember that…is that why Chase left?”

“Yeah,” Fynn looked down at the floor.

“Well,” Liv began, “I’m not sure how to say this.”

“Oh,” Fynn said, the color draining from his face. “It’s that bad?”

Liv laughed. “No, I just don’t know how to say it…Okay, so if I know Callista, she’s…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Thanks!!

really?! that is a really strange coincidence, I just chose those cause those are some of my favorite Disney movies lol

@freedomwriter76

I love it!! you did really good!!

@esther-c

In the first chapter, the biggest thing I noticed was a lot of telling/info-dumping. It’s not wrong to give some background in the first chapter, but the key word is “some.” I felt like there was a lot of information about her father and how he had disappeared a while ago. I absolutely love how you described Sef missing him, but I do th…

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@savannah_grace2009 @jonas @rae @highscribeofaetherium @anyone

Not that this RP is moving very much at all right now… but I’m just giving you a heads-up that I won’t be on KP much, if at all, this week. I’m taking a break from electronics, but I’ll be back on Sunday or Monday next week.

@savannah_grace2009

Ok! So I finally have some feedback for your WIP. (Sorry it took so long 😭)

In the first chapter, the biggest thing I noticed was a lot of telling/info-dumping. It’s not wrong to give some background in the first chapter, but the key word is “some.” I felt like there was a lot of information about her father and how he had d…[Read more]

Though Ransom could just be a nickname some people call him…

@whalekeeper

He sounds awesome!!

Some name ideas…

• Axel
• Jett
• Orion
• Zayn
• Roscoe
• Benedict
• Kieran

@savanah_grace2009

Fynn

Fynn chuckled to cover how awkward his question had become. He fumbled with his bangs for a second, then put his hand back on Liv’s arm. “Well… there was one today…” He cast another glance Callie’s way and sighed. “She was trying to invite Chase to come to the dance and even invited him to come with us. I wasn’t exactl…[Read more]

@walkbyfaith @grcr @beth-torres @anyone-else-on-this-topic

So I haven’t been reading with the same plan y’all are doing, but I have been going through Genesis on my own. I think the thing that’s stood out to me the most is the beautiful balance of God’s justice and mercy. I’ve only made it as far as after the Flood, but still, I can see that God…[Read more]