Brianne

@theshadow

Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]

@esther-c Gotcha! A P.S. would be fun, but it might lessen the impact of the ending, so it depends on what you do. As it is right now, it doesn’t scream “actual letter” to me. It’s kind of like a thank-you-note (not exactly, but I don’t know how else to explain it.) or just a note. With a word count as short as yours, that’s fine, but maybe it’d…[Read more]

@hybridlore

It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?

Thanks!! Oh yes, that was so hard! I was going to keep it lighthearted and goofy, and then I was like, Hold on. And tried something a little different. 😛

Ummm… a…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Wow, that was creepy. I guess I don’t like horror. But it was pretty well-written, I think. It was cool how you tied the ending into the beginning.

If you want feedback faster in the future, I would tag people, otherwise your post gets buried underneath all the other topics and we have to go scrolling for it. Although, if you e…[Read more]

@theducktator

Lolol! I would ask @jonas since he’s the leader of the Adventure one. I don’t know who’s in charge of the others… I’m sure @whalekeeper would know.

@esther-c

It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?

Also, are you planning to add a name at the top?

@grcr

No worries!! :))

@elishavet-pidyon

Lol! Frfr 🤣

@liberty

sounds great!! Tysm!!

@liberty @keilah-h

Thanks ladies!! I will definitely consider that!

@theducktator

Thank you!! Yes, I love it too!

@theducktator

Unfortunately, I don’t think so. Ellette is out of town for the next two weeks, and I have family visiting this week (and I’ll be on vacation next week.) I would imagine that we’ll pick it back up on one of the following Saturdays, unless @savannah_grace2009 or someone else is interested in leading them while we’re gone. I don’t k…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Oh no, I’m sorry! I’ll be praying for y’all as you travel and try to get things worked out.

We’ll miss you! 😢

@the_lost-journal

Oh…

I just feel bad :/

I don’t like it when I hurt people’s feelings  😥

@keilah-h

yeahhhh lol

I just asked ChatGPT to write a cringy story for me lolll

🔥🔥 THE LEGEND OF SIR BURGERFACE 2: REVENGE OF THE EVIL BROCCOLI KING’S COUSIN’S PET GOLDFISH 🔥🔥
Once upon a time, in the SUPER AWESOME kingdom of Snacktopia, Sir Burgerface was CHILLING on his golden throne made of curly fries, sipping a milkshake of power. Everybody loved him because he…

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@the_lost-journal

…?

oh…

😓

I’m so confused…did I say something wrong? I was just saying that I like your name!!

I’m sorry if something I said hurt your feelings… :/

@keilah-h

also I’m still laughing about “bRiNg a MeLoN” lollll

It’s my favorite thing ever hahaha

@keilah-h

yessss I get like this too, I decide a scene is cringey, but I like it too much to remove it.

YES YES YES YES YESSSSSS

that’s the most relatable thing I’ve heard XDXD

What are they gonna do to Sef’s little sis?

Well…its kinda a long story and it’s gonna give away a lot (I also need to flesh out the plot wayyy more)

When I have all m…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

However, I have also gotten far enough to determine something else. Due to some things such as the romance, I don’t think am in the target audience for your story. I am no longer going to read this. This does not mean your story is bad, it just means that it’s not for me and I think others will be able to give you better fee…

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