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@liberty @ellette-giselle

Yay!! I’ll see you guys there!! 😁

Liberty, great section! 😂

@ellette-giselle

Lol.

@esther-c

Sorry I’m just now getting to this!!!!

My main critique would be that you spend a lot of time on dialogue. I kind of feel like we just got thrown into the story and all we know about the characters is because of what they say. Maybe breaking up some dialogue and really showing us who they characters are would help…it kind of feels l…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Poor Highscribe. What did you do to her?

@ellette-giselle

Leon is definitely more confident and the leader. It feels like Julian looks to him and gets more concerned about things. And Julian likes to make quips. That was just what I think I noticed from this chapter.

@liberty @keilah-h @theducktator @hybridlore

Ok! So I’m not posting this as soon as I wanted, lol, but this is the almost final draft and I’d like your thoughts again if y’all are willing.

I didn’t change any of the tenses or add words because I wanted it to sound very “in the moment” if that makes sense. I did add a couple of things that hopefu…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

He’s my favorite so I want him to die.

No wonder you kill off so many characters. 😅

🖋️Official KP Psychopath✒️

Lolol

@ellette-giselle

Good section!

Roland, I in no way want to go against God’s will, but are you sure?” Leon asked.

Roland nodded.

When I read this, I thought that maybe Leon and Julian should have prayed about it before letting him come with them.

Roland shook his head in disgust. “I have a mind to smash it,” he muttered.

“Whoa, whoa, whoa,” Le…

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@ellette-giselle

That’s not his only chapter, just the next one when he appears… I think.

He also needs to die.

That sounds contradictory, lol.

@ellette-giselle

Thanks!! I’m glad it’s working, I honestly don’t even know what I did lol. Warrain is based a lot on Overwatch, which I’ve played a lot before, so maybe it’s coming from experience and that’s how. (It’s still a very different game though.)

I sure like Cole.

When’s Alec coming back? he was my favorite!! *puppy whimper*

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@elishavet-pidyon Umm… I think I just tried to tag you by your CWW name…? 😅

@whalekeeper

Great topic!

I don’t know, I’m sure they affect my writing a lot more than I realize. The one that has the most is obviously reading but I don’t know if that counts. XD

A lot of my projects for a while had something to do with space and flying starships, because I read Skyward by Brandon Sanderson and loved it. I guess that’s an…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@grcr

LOL I love these parts. 💛💛

Aww, thanks! 🥰 Me too 🤪

Would you want to write this differently… ? before I saw the “she drew out her name” part, my mind read it that she spelled it out. (Maybe I’m just crazy…?)

I don’t knowww 😭 I’ve seen it written like that in books before, but I feel like if I changed it to italics it would carry a differe…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 ^^

@theshadow @keilah-h @theducktator @linus-smallprint @ellette-giselle @savannah-grace2009

Chapter 11! I’m not totally decided if I’ll completely reduce down to one a week in the future, so you may get a few surprise double chapters, but this week there’s only one.

Also, TCoH has become my longest project at just over 33k words and about 100 W…[Read more]