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@godlyfantasy12 Poor November and Ara😭

BUT I LOVE THE SCENES

Callan is…💀 and I ADORE Ara’s uncle already🤭

and I think you portrayed that scene very well without going into explaining it completely and rather leaving it vague.

Job very well done👏👏👏

@esther-c @keilah-h @ellette-giselle @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @godlyfantasy12 (btw, I’ve been LOVING the scenes you’ve been posting, girl🤩) @rae @theducktator @grcr @anyone-else-idk-lol

Y’all want a Riker scene for Book #3? 🫣

well here it is anyway (part of it at least)

What did Leon know?

As far as Riker knew, Leon had a good, loving…

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@ellette-giselle

I just find the whole idea of his story interesting, and the different ways he has gone about fighting the slave-trade.

Definitely.

I wonder what is hooking everyone so much about this section?! Why do y’all like it so much? 😂

I don’t know! Maybe it was really well written or something. Also, just the events were super i…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

It’s a weird system, okay. 😂 I try not to cheat, but . . . it’s hard. I need to know what button to press. 😝

Well, like, the podium for this book, which includes Leon, Julian, and Ian. I think. xD

He seems like a good guy. His backstory sorta reminded me of Julian’s, just cause they both lost their little brother.

@ellette-giselle

Well . . . ahem . . . I sort of kind of saw that “It was Rolf.” before I read the section, since I had to scroll down to the bottom of the email to get to Kingdom Pen.

But, no, I don’t think I would have. I was still a little surprised, because I didn’t realize Quayid was going to be Rolf. But I knew someone was going to be…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Rolf!!! 😁

Wow, I really liked that section. That might have been my favorite part so far. I love Ian. He’s the best.

(And poor Albee, but I have a feeling he’s going to seek God out now that Leon’s gone…?)

@the_lost-journal

Pax

@the_lost-journal

Phew, so glad it didn’t actually happened. No worries! I’ll continue to pray for her.

@the_lost-journal

No worries! That’s still serious and important and I’ll keep praying 🙏🏻🫶🏻

@linus-smallprint

Yeah. I didn’t think it was realistic for her to be able to keep disappearing without her family knowing.

@ellette-giselle

Leon!!! I didn’t think you would kill him!!

I didn’t feel like the overseers punishing Leon instead of Ian was unrealistic. However, I’m starting to wonder what Ian did to deserve it. I know they’d had their eyes on him, but all he did was trip, right?

Julian’s scene was good too. I liked how it started raining and they were…[Read more]

@theshadow

Awesome, thanks!

@linus-smallprint

Great, thank you!! What made you guess that? You’re right xD

@the_lost-journal

Oh no, I’m so sorry. Praying for them 🙏

@the_lost-journal
Oh my goodness! 🫢 I can’t believe it… She’ll be in my prayers. 😥😥💕💕

@theducktator

Whattttt

That’s crazyyyy!

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h

Yeah, that makes sense. I’ve read the Ilyon Chronicles, which kind of has a similar vibe to your story’s time period and world, and one of the side characters (Christian) married a former prostitute after she became a believer. So, maybe it kind of reminded me of that, I don’t know.

@ellette-giselle

Yep lol.

Yeah, that makes sense. I couldn’t remember if it was an area he went through often or not.

Gotcha. Yeah, I get that. I was wondering if she might become a love interest for Julian, but if not, it’s probably better not to involve her too much.

@ellette-giselle

To be honest, I kind of guessed she was going to be a prostitute, so Julian’s reaction seemed a little much (especially to seeing her bare shoulder or whatever lol.) But then I reminded myself that it was different back then, so it made sense.

I would like to see her become a bigger part of the story, unless that doesn’t wor…[Read more]

@keilah-h

I’ve tried. I think she enjoys tormenting us 😂

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in our minds would be a big thing you…[Read more]