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@hybridlore @keilah-h @theducktator @liberty

Telling y’all this now so I won’t procrastinate this week, lol.

I’m going to edit the paragraph and then repost it by Friday, taking into account your suggestions.

@keilah-h

Oh yeahhh! That’d be perfect! 😂

@liberty

Here it is!!!

Wind spiraled frozen fractals and reddened Lainey’s cold-kissed nose.

Every breath crystalized in frozen puffs, and she wrapped her arms around herself, shivering.

The sun sunk beneath the houses across the street, bathing the neighborhood in amber light, and Lainey hugged her knees to her chest as she watched the s…

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@keilah-h

Haha, true though. 😂

The guys I know can do the accent pretty well though, just cuz they’re so accustomed to it🤪

@keilah-h

Lolll 😂😂

The Aussies I know are actually redheads…

(Bro… I wonder if Andrew is stalking our conversation, seeing as he’s an Aussie 🤭)

@theshadow

It looks so much better! I love that we got to see their family now. I feel like I know the characters so much better already.

@keilah-h

what is it about them that we Americans find so fascinating??

I have no idea 😂 I guess Americans just have a boring flat accent so we like to hear something different 🤣

@liberty

I feel bad saying this because a couple others have said the same thing, but I can’t submit a story this time. 😭😭 School and other responsibilities took priority over writing these past couple of weeks and I wasn’t able to get much done. 😣 I’m so sorry!!

@elishavet-pidyon

I love that soo much!! That was always so sad to me. I didn’t know C. S. Lewis told everyone what happened to her afterward!

You should totally write it!!

@theshadow

I would love to see it!

@theducktator

Lol. Everything looks better with an ellipse.

I’ll watch that. 

@linus-smallprint

Awesome! I approved it.

@liberty

I’m going to be able to submit something!!!!!!!

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Y’all were talking about British and Australian exclamations and it reminded me of something that happened recently…

So we have friends who are Australian, but their dad is the only one who actually naturally has the accent. I’m a sucker for the Aussie accent, lol. And I was talking with him one time and with some…[Read more]

Also, one thing I just thought of; we don’t really care about the characters’ families since we haven’t met them yet. Maybe it would be a good idea to lengthen the first chapter by showing Jack and Elina getting home and seeing their parents and siblings.

@theshadow

This chapter does a good job building up the suspense! The only thing I would say is yeah, Ellette has a point. These girls seem to be so mean for no real reason that I can guess at yet. It makes them feel flatter, rather than like actual people who have motives and stuff for their actions. Their ultimate goal, especially in a…[Read more]

@jonas

Wow. I love this idea. This sounds super interesting. Is it connected to your current series?

@ellette-giselle

Aw, that’s okay! If you know of a different way to get it through, I’m open to trying other things, but I understand if it’s too difficult for you to do right now.

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have a chapter…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]