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@jonas

So this is essentially a Naln and Szeth character. I like how you added the Unspace sword you talked about earlier, and the price of hypocrisy was a good ending and theme. Great job!

@jonas

Whoa. That was really interesting. Great job!

Mind if I ask if there is a moral of the story at all?

@freedomwriter

lol that one is funny!! XD XD

@freedomwriter76

lol XD

@jonas

 I’ve never read a first person novel with multiple POVs, but that’s not to say they don’t exist.

Oh, that’s funny! I’ve read WAY more first person novels with multiple POV’s. i’ve read more of those than third person POV’s.

@savannah_grace2009

This is indeed a big change. You may be changing a bit too much, while change is good, you can halt your progress completely by making to many revisions (*says as if I wasn’t the most guilty of this exact thing). However, first person can help more with experiential writing, which I think is more your style anyways. I think it…[Read more]

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium

So with my revision of my WIP, I’m changing things a little. I’m thinking of writing it in first person now. I started writing yesterday, but now I’m stuck! How should I continue?

Also, is there anything I could improve on?

(Am I changing things too much?)

Chapter 1

The world is a dark…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

Just fight him or something. The Sword chirped, That always seems to help.

Lol

Ottoline

She opened her eyes and sat up. Rays of light seeped in through the windows. She turned over in her bed. They were all exhausted.

“Do we have to go downstairs to eat breakfast? I mean have to?” Hedieh was saying from the bunk directly above Ottoline’s. “Because I don’t want to get murdered by a guy with anger issues.”

“I don’t want to…[Read more]

@esther-c

Great job! Yesterday I wrote 1,167.

@rae

lol

Who’s going to write the next RP?

@jonas

Somehow, I am going to force Ellis and Ottoline to get along. hehe. 😈😈😈

@jonas

Yeah I was just joking XD

@trailblazer @highscribeofaetherium

Yeah, i don’t think so either.

@highscribeofaetherium

ALL of it is hyperbole XD

Yep.

You know what would be fun? Once everyone calms down, the boys and girls play truth or dare together, lol

@thearcaneaxiom

good question.

Question, how much of the Hyperbolii’s characteristics are inherently true, and how much is literally just hyperbole?🤣

…and eat out of their trash cans…

which are filled with a gazillion mountains worth of food so healthy, people can go for eons upon eons without eating anything after eating a single crumb! To maintain normality however, the Hyperbolii…