Scoutillus Finch

I think I’m gonna take Chase out of the hospital now.

Though, I could’ve brought him back earlier, seen as how no one apparently knew he went there anyways

Chase

Chase walked slowly down the sidewalk, looking down at his shoes. His left arm was in a sling, his head hurt terribly, and he was tired, but otherwise okay. He halted his slow walk…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle oh sorry I forgot about that! Eddie would’ve loved to go with Rory, but she’s also the type to jump at the opportunity to go with any guy

@koshka @raxforge

The Twins 

Ellie rolled her eyes.

“Don’t let her scare you,” she said to Syph. “You don’t need a partner. You can just show up. You don’t even need to dance. You could…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry I’m just now getting to this!!!!

My main critique would be that you spend a lot of time on dialogue. I kind of feel like we just got thrown into the story and all we know about the characters is because of what they say. Maybe breaking up some dialogue and really showing us who they characters are would help…it kind of feels l…[Read more]

@koshka @raxforge

Ellie 

“Great!” Eddie winked at Syph. “Now you just need to get yourself a girl.”

Rax turned to Ellie, “What about you, do you have a partner?”

She looked surprised. Her attempt to stay unnoticed by her classmates had failed quickly.

“Yes,” she said softly. “My friend Marcel.”

@ellette-giselle

Anti protection squad

This got me laughing out loud pretty hard XD

And, I’m sorry, but after meeting you in person, you’re too sweet to be a psychopath <3

@koshka That dancing sounds cool! I thought of Irish dance when you said his dancing was competitive. And I love that his water magic is part of it.

I used to take Irish dance lessons when I was little *cue nostalgic flashbacks of me being a clumsy child*

@koshka @raxforge

Ellie

Eddie didn’t hesitate. “Yes! I’d love to go with you!”

Ellie looked up in surprise. They had only known these guys for about a minute and a half. Ed was grinning and her tail flicked in excitement. She shot her sister a quick triumphant look, similar to whenever she won when they played video games. Then, just as quick…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

And Ed (except her hair is in a ponytail)

this is Ellie

@raxforge Just realized I never told you what my characters look like.

So they’re both aliens, but look mostly human except for their tails and some other features. They’re about 14-15yrs old (I haven’t really decided still), but they might look even younger because they’re only a little over 3 feet tall.

I’ll post some drawings too.

Also, I…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

That makes sense. I bet you’re really good at writing villains lol

Despite acting like he has a death wish, though, Dante doesn’t actually want to make Alpha any more angry than he is now. He doesn’t hate Alpha at all or want to hurt him. He took the knife because he was scared, and would have tried to defend himself if Alpha…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@ellette-giselle

If Nar is his sister, he’s going to be furious that his new enemy is carrying around pictures of his sister. If Nar is a crush then he’s going to be really mad because it doesn’t seem like he would want everyone in kingdom come to know that he carries around her picture.

Nar is his sister, and he is very protective of her.…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@ellette-giselle

Ha! Took me a second to figure out where this is going……. I’ll be surprised if they’re both still alive and out of jail by the end of the day.

Lol

You kidding me? The police have already tried to take Alpha (when he stabbed Jep and Chase went to the hospital) and well, Alpha hasn’t stepped foot in the station yet.

@theducktator @ellette-giselle

I bet he’s gonna die in the end.

He can’t die; I like him too much!

Oh dear…well, two more stories left and then you’ll know. Don’t worry, Baron will be happy with the ending.

 I would love to see this published someday!

Hopefully sometime in Spring I will submit it to a publisher. Fingers crossed though cuz…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle Do you really kill off that many characters? XD

I would’ve gone for the photo. Nothing like a good photo to hold hostage. 😉

I guess my brain just doesn’t work like that. How could that be helpful?