Scoutillus Finch

By SE did you mean Story Embers or Kingdom Pen?

Thanks SO much! I copied/pasted into the post and then noticed that the word thrid wasn’t italicized as I intended it to be, but it didn’t occur to me that Jade’s thoughts wouldn’t be italicized either for some reason.😊

Jade would go to the Caribbean and he would prefer to maneuver every maze.

Marian would like Norway. she could sit in a log cabin sipping tea by a fire in her sweats. and she already is super agile so she’d maneuver every maze too.

Would your character rather spend an hour with someone who talks too much or too little?

That sounds great! thanks for reading!😊

I also enjoy writing fantasy, but I am doing a sci-fi currently. I have actually started a topic for people to critique if you want to read it.😊

I am learning acoustic guitar, I may try electric once I’ve mastered Acoustic, sounds like a lot of fun.

Would your Character rather run out of ideas or run out of energy?

What do you mean by be there or be square?

Jade would want to own a food truck, have the glory (his conscience is fried), whisper, loose a leg (he actually already is a monopod thanks to an acid-bomb that supposedly killed his brother), would be alone because his family reminds him of past pain he’s trying to forget, would be bitten by a fish…[Read more]

When y’all have the time, I made a new topic called My first Sci-fi short story… I just posted my WIP there to be critiqued. 🙂 Feel free to read if you have the time:)

This is the only way I could do to send it b/c I am not very tech-savvy and i couldn’t put it in a word doc.

Jade squatted beside the frozen peaks, his breath coming in ragged gasps. The blizzard had passed, and everything was buried except the anti-freeze ocean. He hit the side of his helmet and the glass changed to clear, the light glared upon him like some surgical light.

How long had he been running?

Long. Exceedingly long.

Where was he?

No idea.…[Read more]

Jade laid in bed pretending to sleep a few minutes after he woke up, mulling over his options. In all of them, he was trapped until Fabian decided he should leave. Jade shifted again, pretending to slowly wake, may as well enjoy what he could of Fabian’s hospitality.

“Marning Jade.”

Jade sat up and feigned a yawn, “Is it morning out there?”…[Read more]

A sharp bang crashed Jade into consciousness. He sat up and the skin on his right side stretched too far. He flopped back with a grunt of pain and stared at his welted skin, his solitary ring and pinky finger to his stub leg shriveled with partially healed acid burns. He looked at the place where the grey sheets should have draped over his right…[Read more]

I am sending it each section by the *** I used between differing parts

Ice

By Dawn Robin (ScoutFinch180)

He had never killed a monster before. Not that he was unused to killing. On occasion, he would kill people who stood in the way of the highest bidder if he was bored. Mostly he preferred to con and steal from those who were wealthy and lived in luxury while the rest of the people lived in boring apartments and…[Read more]

Also, please tell me anything you notice and like/dislike that hasn’t been covered in my questions, I don’t mind your criticism, talk about my story as strongly as you like. (Jade probably needs it anyway, because he is a jerk)

Your website looks so pretty!

Ok, thanks for clearing that up! 😊

Thanks for the tip!

Do you think I could copy the text into a post like where my words are now?

What is the address to your blog? I’d love to check it out!

That is so cool!

I am going to be brave and very soon share my short story on the forum for people to critique. Is there a way I can put a word-doc into a post?