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@savannah_grace2009

Hey girl, sorry I haven’t really read more of your WIP yet.  I’ve been pretty busy (which is why I kind of vanished for a few days). I’ll try to read some more and get you some feedback sometime this week.

@savannah_grace2009

I dragged myself to co-op anyway. 🙁   I just finished your prologue. It’s good, but you overuse italics.

@savannah_grace2009

I’m a little late to responding, but as I was reading the things you shared, I just had a couple thoughts. Not sure if they’ll be helpful or not, but I figured I’d share anyway and let you decide lol.

One thing I noticed that could potentially be a lie (and maybe this fits more for future scenes after this all takes place) is…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Yeah, as long as you put a TW, I don’t think it matters.

Okay, perfect. First, have to clear out all of the uh… wonderful writing before posting it.

What?? XD

Lol, I was rewatching an episode from Martha Speaks (I don’t care if it’s for kids it’s one of the greatest shows ever), and this line really spoke to me.

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@savannah_grace2009

I’m glad it helped! I knew a lot of it was randomness, but when I can look at my difficulty in a new light, everything can start to click. Randomness that really doesn’t fit is typically what I use like. XD

I was trying to imply with that part, how Neveah’s heart broke for Sef. Putting myself in Neveah’s shoes, nothing wou…

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@savannah_grace2009

Wow. That’s dark. Pretty good story-wise, though. I’ll just go on a rabbit trail of plotting and hope it gives ideas. XD

I liked how you had Neveah try to combat the lie, and it’s obvious it’s for Sef’s sake, not her own. To make this sequence really work, maybe make Sef think her Mani is just trying to save herself – it’s…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ooo, lies. XD if I remember right, they want to start with little lies (because they’re more believable) and then work toward bigger lies with more power. So here are some ideas for chains of lies.

“You should be able to be strong enough on your own” (so when you falter, “you must be a failure” can follow)

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@savannah_grace2009

Can it be any lies or does it have to be something that has to do specifically with Pythonos? I’m not familiar enough with your stories to help if they have to be specific, but I might be able to give a few suggestions otherwise.

@savannah_grace2009

I haven’t started it yet, but I will have read all of it by the end of February. Once I read it all, I’ll give you my overall impression and thoughts! :))

@savannah_grace2009

Okay. Don’t worry, I didn’t think she had become is is on the path to becoming a Pythonos at this point.

@savannah_grace2009

Didn’t Sef turn herself in so they wouldn’t take her mother instead?

@savannah_grace2009

I haven’t gotten any further, sorry. It slipped my mind, and then school hit and I don’t have much time each week. You can keep tagging me though, and I’ll read more whenever I get more time.

@savannah_grace2009

Sorry, I made it up to where Sef turns herself into the Pythonos and they mark her, but haven’t touched it for a while and keep on forgetting to do so. I’ll try to read more soon!

@savannah_grace2009

Thank you.

It was someone I didn’t know, but there’s still a lot of craziness. We’re leaving for Idaho on Saturday, so you can guess it’s a little hectic.  😉

@savannah_grace2009

We had a death in the family and I’m super busy, but I’ll see what I can do.

@savannah_grace2009

Yup yup. I was actually thinking about it yesterday. A little busy right now, but I planned to read and catch up very soon. 😉😁

@savannah_grace2009

I haven’t started it yet, but I will later this week. Maybe tomorrow, since I’m probably too sick for co-op.

@savannah_grace2009

As long as you love it and it contains a piece of your heart, that’s all that matters. <3

I’m not sure how to feel about this. I feel more as if I’m trying to put my heart into it, and I haven’t found the way to express it in writing format. But thanks for the encouragement. 😁

@linus-smallprint

If this were the case, then w…

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