SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨

@savannah_grace2009

That sounds good, I’m glad you were able to get a clear answer from God! I agree, I think it still definitely works even without the shorter beginning. And even if it does turn some readers away, it’s going to touch the people God wants it to. 🙂

@savannah_grace2009

Thats totally ok, go with what God wants you to do! The second chapter eased you more into the action which is also a very good type of introduction😊

I kind of am still a little worried that nobody will like it the other way XD

Dont worry, I do! Think of really popular books like Harry Potter,  J.K. Rowling didn’t jump right…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Yes, but they probably would have called it courting back then. That’s why Libbie was so upset with Etta to start off with, because Etta started seeing Chester without telling her what was going on. And Etta had already known that Libbie had a crush on Chester.

@savannah_grace2009

Here ya go, while I’m here I might as well give you more.

As the winter thawed into spring, I knew it was time to make things right. I crossed the fields to the Cullivers’ house, and as I approached, I saw Etta’s petite figure working in the garden. She didn’t hear me coming until I was about ten feet away.

“Good day, Et…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

No problem!

And don’t worry about if people like the intro! If God is telling you how it should be, He’ll give you the readers and all too!! 🙂☺️

@savannah_grace2009

Sounds good! The second was good too!! It’s always better to listen to what God tells you over all other advice!! 😊

@savannah_grace2009

LOLLLL now it’s my turn to mispell your tag

@savannah_grace2009

Ahhh I want to tell you what I had planned but I don’t want to give spoilersssss!

@savannah_grace2009

About prologues…I’ve never heard that before! Mine is technically a first chapter, so should I just erase the label of “prologue”?? 😂

You do whatever you want, girl, it’s your story. XD

I had actually never heard that before, but it kind of makes sense. I think some writers also use prologues for info-dumping. I’d rather have…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ok so in this RP I say Liv has blue eyes, but correct me if I’m wrong. 😂

Lukas

Lukas found he couldn’t take his eyes off Liv’s face. He tried, but somehow, he found himself drowning in the crystalline pool of her blue eyes.

“Aww.” He heard a whisper pass by him. He blinked and looked behind him, only to see Fynn dance awa…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

First of all, I love your writing!!

Second, my actual answer to your question. XD Ok. So I think I prefer the first one better. Though I do have an opinion on prologues… I heard an author (who had been writing since forever) say that he doesn’t like prologues because typically writers use them as a way to draw readers in bef…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Of course! Sorry, I think my last post lagged. I really like your idea of doing the flashback and then going to Lilitu’s pov, though!

@savannah_grace2009

You guys, thank you so much for reading it and for everything!!

You’re soo welcome!! 😅

I was kinda scared for some reason that nobody would be interested to even look at it!

Ah, don’t worry, I always enjoy reading the works of other writers!! 😉😊

@savannah_grace2009

it’s all true though…I became such a better writer when I joined KP and after talking to all of you guys!!

I did to! I dont think I would have ever got this is close to finishing without everyone on here <3

@savannah_grace2009

Yeah, that would work!! 😄

@grcr @savannah_grace2009

Yeah, I did notice that! Maybe Lilitu’s chapter could come after Sef’s?

@sara

Definitely! I hope you figure it out!

@savannah_grace2009

Hmmm…

Alright, my basic answer: the first one draws me in more and I like its prologue. I do like the first two or three chapters of the second one, though.

I don’t know if you only wanted advice on the first/begining chapter… if so, you don’t have to listen to me or read my next few thoughts…. but if you don’t m…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

This is supposed to say “feel free to tag me in any post”…so yeah…XD

Dont worry, I understood XD I make errors like that all the time 😂

@savannah_grace2009

Hey! I think the first one does a great job of pulling the reader in more, but the second one also has some great writing in it.

I know the chapter with Sef and her mom really means a lot to you, and it does a good job of setting up the backstory of Sef’s parents and a little bit of world building. So really they both work in…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel. I will defiantly look through your link and give my critique 🙂 And pretty soon I will be posting some of mine to get feedback, I’ll be sure to tag you 🙂