SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨

@savannah_grace2009

Aww that’s so sweet of you! 🥰 I’m honored to be called out in the acknowledgements, thank you so much!!

@savannah_grace2009

(EDIT: this took longer than I thought, so I only got through he prologue. I’ll do chapter 1 tomorrow and chapter 2 on Wednesday.)

Alright, here’s some feedback. I’m just reading through and commenting as I go. As a warning for anyone else reading this, there may be spoilers in what I say here, since I’m familiar with much o…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME

Because I’m a writer.

Or it could be payback for your sad prologue and first chapter.

Jkjk

I will update you if Terry forgives Estelle, so you can be happy again (or maybe post a Tenz scene).

 

@theshadow

Thank you so much!!! haha, I’m glad you liked that. Most times I write funny things and then wait in anticipation for the reader rto laugh. They look at me and are like “what? what am I supposed to laugh about?”

More body language. That goes to the notes on the side. Thanks. Ah, more conflicting emotions. got…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Okay, just read the first and second chapter, and they were awesome!! As I was reading it, I was curious to learn more about the world and the backgrounds of each character. This already feels like a book I would love to read and learn more about the story, characters, world, etc. The theme/moral for the story is great too.…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Nice to meet you, thank for the introduction!

I’m Shadow, and besides writing, I love to draw, bake, sew, embroider, read, and go for hikes (I love cats). Congrats on finishing your first year of high school, I hope it went well!!

Yeah…I kinda got a little lazy with my descriptions XD I will work on that!!!

I feel that XD

@savannah_grace2009

Sorry, I’ve been offline more and more lately.

You’re welcome! I’m really glad that you’ve learned and grown so much, and you’ll only continue to get better as you pursue this with the passion you’ve shown!

I would also be honored to appear on your acknowledgements, and I love the paragraph you’ve shared from that.

Don’t…[Read more]

For once I actually drew something I’m not greatly ashamed to show…

@freed_and_redeemed @grcr @trailblazer @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @theshadow

This is a picture of Tomoko from that short story I shared with you. Sorry about the poor quality, our scanner likes to give everything a greenish or yellowish…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

oh ok fine. Here we go.

SPOILERS FOR ANY SENSIBLE PEOPLE WHO KNOW WHAT’S GOOD FOR THEM TO SKIP!!! LOLLOLOL

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

• Introduction of Marcus and Julius.
• inciting moment. (Lucius dies)
• Marcus starts to seek the truth
• Marcus finds the Catacombs (note. start showing differences in the beliefs. i.e.…

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@savannah_grace2009

Alright, sorry this is late, but the prologue was really good! I found it intriguing, and after I finished it, I wanted to read more. The only thing was that the room that the Pythanos is sitting in could be described a bit more (like specifically what it looks like). The description of the atmosphere was great though.

@savannah_grace2009

Just read the first part and Stars! It’s great!

I’m kinda jealous.

It was interesting, because all my charries were for whatever reason reading it too. And their opinions were all very interesting and could get them in huge trouble in that world.

@savannah_grace2009

 

Ok, this is starting to come together! I’m really liking this!!!

@savannah_grace2009

Well, I have my main points written out. But not the WHOLE thing. Like I know where I’m going with all this, and I know the main plot twists, climax, ending, all that. I didn’t just write the whole plot though. It’s more in like bullet points, if that makes sense.

 

I’m about to be a senior. Nope, not graduated yet. Almost!!!

@savannah_grace2009

Chase

She’s beautiful. Chase watched Sef with eyes of green and blue. “Y-your l-like my m-mom.” Chase caught her gaze, exploring the depths of her green eyes with large, childish eyes. Catching himself, he quickly turned away, a little color coming to his pale face.

@savannah_grace2009

Ah, that makes more sense about the trees. It’s an interesting idea. I’m excited to see how it develops.

 

The sickness also makes sense too!

I would like to know more about the Paynes as well. Like, why are they outcast, what is the race mixing thing, etc. etc. If that gets explained later then you can just leave it and…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

No, i don’t have anything written out. I mean, I  know what’s going to happen, but I really don’t want to say. However, if you need me to tell you for editing purposes then I will.

ALSO GIRL HOW DO YOU WRITE 20 CHAPTERS IN A DAY

Well, there has never been a day when I can’t write. If I don’t have time to write it out on the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

lol, no problem! I should have plenty of time Monday morning.

However…I have a bad habit of info dumping backstory in the first chapter

I used to have that problem as well (seems to be a common plague, especially for fantasy writers), but now I kind of have the opposite problem: my style has shifted to be a very strict 3…[Read more]

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Oooooo So, so good!! I LOVE the name Cassian!! Oh man, this is so good! I can already envision this going so, so good. Oh man, I love it!

Ok, the killing the tree thing was a little strange. Explanation please!!! But I guess we’ll get to that later.

Also, I would like to know a little more about this sickness. why is it…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

No!!! nononono!! No spoilers!!! Spoilers are not allowed. N.O. They are illegal!!!!

 

Yay!! Can’t wait for the next chapter.

 

However…I have a bad habit of info dumping backstory in the first chapter

Why does that sound so familiar…….. *looks over the last 20 first chapters I’ve written in the past year* Oh… that’s w…[Read more]