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@savannah_grace2009

You’re right, it does come across as a bit extreme. But Kratos was/is a representation of every Andromedan race, and it’s showing how EVERYONE treats Paynes. Paynes aren’t even seen as “people” anymore (think WWII during the holocaust, except there aren’t any sympathizers). I can make him less…idk, happy that this is happening,…

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@savannah_grace2009

Awesome! I love it!!The way Sef makes friends, that is so classic little kid, and I just love their interaction! It’s so perfect! The only thing I would say was when it said Cassian “ran, trying to outrun himself” I would use the word, “sprinted,” “bolted,” etc. Otherwise it’s a repeat that kinda grates for people like me.…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I am so sorry…I just can’t keep up with the ammount of chapters you write

Haha, that’s ok! Thank you for the help you have been giving! It’s been awesome!

I was concerned that you might not have enough plot for a full novel,

I wanted it to be a novella, I just wasn’t sure if I could fully develop the plot in a novella, but it…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Awwww, so cute <333

I didn’t know Sef and Lilitu knew each other that long!

@savannah_grace2009 @rae @mineralizedwritings @koshka @keilah-h @highscribeofaetherium @grcr @anyone-else-idk-lol-XD

Since I showed y’all where Riker is, here’s the most recent Leon scene👀

“‘And we know that all things work together for good to them that love God, to them who are the called according to his purpose.’”

Tears burned Leon’s…

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@savannah_grace2009

Awwwwww, that is so cute!! I like how you’re connecting the families in this chapter.

“Hi!” she smiled at him. “Do you want to be friends? Look at my drawing! My name’s Sef, what’s your name?”

The boy sat down next to her. “What is it?” he tilted his head to the side, staring at the drawing.

Sef was offended. How c…

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@savannah_grace2009

WHYYY

Heh

Heh

Hehhhhhhh

@rae

*offers several boxes of tissues*

@savannah_grace2009

Because of their spiritual decay as they slowly drifted away from the Great One and became more and more open to the idea of abandoning their faith, they would start to take on characteristics of Pythonos without actually becoming one entirely.

Okay, that explanation works. However, this being the first chapter and all, r…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @rae @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @koshka @ellette_giselle @anyone-else

Anyone want a Riker scene? 👀

Fair warning…Riker is about to plunge into another dark place, and is about to separate himself from everyone that has ever loved him, until he literally comes to the end of himself, and thus this scene may cause some…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Wow, that was really good! I like what you said about the light shining in the darkness. Thanks!

@whalekeeper

I guess I never thought about it that way. Tbh, the only reason the post apocalyptic world exists is because of the main character (he didn’t cause it, but you’ll see why in a second). The main character is supposed to…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Really?!?!

Yep!! XD

Ooh, that’s a good point!!! My thought process was just that Kaden and Sevryn didn’t realize how the oath would affect them.

Both ways work well!! Whatever makes more sense to you; I’m just throwing random ideas to help you brainstorm 😉

Question…why is this a problem?

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@savannah_grace2009

Aww that’s so sweet of you! 🥰 I’m honored to be called out in the acknowledgements, thank you so much!!

@savannah_grace2009

(EDIT: this took longer than I thought, so I only got through he prologue. I’ll do chapter 1 tomorrow and chapter 2 on Wednesday.)

Alright, here’s some feedback. I’m just reading through and commenting as I go. As a warning for anyone else reading this, there may be spoilers in what I say here, since I’m familiar with much o…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME

Because I’m a writer.

Or it could be payback for your sad prologue and first chapter.

Jkjk

I will update you if Terry forgives Estelle, so you can be happy again (or maybe post a Tenz scene).

@theshadow

Thank you so much!!! haha, I’m glad you liked that. Most times I write funny things and then wait in anticipation for the reader rto laugh. They look at me and are like “what? what am I supposed to laugh about?”

More body language. That goes to the notes on the side. Thanks. Ah, more conflicting emotions. got…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Okay, just read the first and second chapter, and they were awesome!! As I was reading it, I was curious to learn more about the world and the backgrounds of each character. This already feels like a book I would love to read and learn more about the story, characters, world, etc. The theme/moral for the story is great too.…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Nice to meet you, thank for the introduction!

I’m Shadow, and besides writing, I love to draw, bake, sew, embroider, read, and go for hikes (I love cats). Congrats on finishing your first year of high school, I hope it went well!!

Yeah…I kinda got a little lazy with my descriptions XD I will work on that!!!

I feel that XD

@savannah_grace2009

Sorry, I’ve been offline more and more lately.

You’re welcome! I’m really glad that you’ve learned and grown so much, and you’ll only continue to get better as you pursue this with the passion you’ve shown!

I would also be honored to appear on your acknowledgements, and I love the paragraph you’ve shared from that.

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For once I actually drew something I’m not greatly ashamed to show…

@freed_and_redeemed @grcr @trailblazer @jonas @highscribeofaetherium @savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @theshadow

This is a picture of Tomoko from that short story I shared with you. Sorry about the poor quality, our scanner likes to give everything a greenish or yellowish…[Read more]