Sara

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Of course that would also mean going to bed at a decent hour…like at 9 PM?!?!? That’s so early but I need to start going to bed earlier…so you could be my bedtime accountability partner XD XD

9:00 a good time to go to bed. 9:00-9:30 is my goal. Well, as you can see, I’m awake so if you want to do some sprinting I’ll do it with…[Read more]

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ALTERNATE ENDING!!!
Julius lowered his head, but beyond the taunts of the voice, he could feel something. It was like the warmth of the sun’s first rays creeping into the courtyard. It was a tiny, tiny sliver of peace. Julius found himself looking back at Marcus and Flavia. I was there for them. A voice w…[Read more]

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I do like the ambiguity of the ending, I just wanted to make sure Julius chose right lol.

well, now that there’s two of you saying it and not just one, I feel more inclined to go to go dig up the alternate ending from it’s hiding spot. lol.

It is good thing, it shows that your book has an impact on the reader.

Yay!!! I’m so glad!!

Your…

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Yeah, you could do them as separate chapters, and that should work. But also, be careful about waiting too long before launching into the bulk of the story. I don’t believe we’ve even reached the inciting incident yet, and you don’t want the reader to be thinking “let’s just get on with it!” You probably still have a little…[Read more]

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I think this chapter was good! The only feedback I have is that the time jump was pretty confusing. You do tell us that it’s three years later fairly early on, but for the first few sentences it’s confusing, because the setting is nearly the same as the first scene. The two scenes also feel pretty much unrelated to each other,…[Read more]

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between 5:00 to 6:00 in the morning

@savannah_grace2009 I know right??

Even I’m guilty of it.

• Tech was turned to a cyborg and would’ve been brainwashed into killing his friends, Winter Soldier style, if he hadn’t been rescued.
• Crosshair–his brother–nearly froze solid in a mission gone wrong, and then was subjected to torture for months. He also had the only people who…

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It’s 1:30 over here. Hmm…. Yeah, it’s the morning that I write the best in. I can’t think in the afternoon and evening. I am a 100% morning person.

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No, i like never write in the evening. I normally try to get off before 2:00 at the latest.

We would be opposites wouldn’t we. XD

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Awesome! I’m not consistently writing today because it’s the 4th. You want to try it out tomorrow? I’ll be writing in the morning.

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Oh! I basically do that all the time! lol. So I would just tell you what time I’m “sprinting” to?

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what is “this”?

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I read super fast too, which is why I would like to know what the world is like so I can concentrate on the plot. lol.

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(Sorry I took forever to reply!! Life has been busy and I’m doing the King’s Daughters’ Writing Camp this month)

Lukas

Lukas bit his lip, his gaze roaming the ground as if searching for an answer in the dirt. “W-well, I don’t think H-He’d just stop listening…” he wet his lips. “B-but I can pray for you if-if you want.”…[Read more]

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Actually it was “Cassian ran, trying to outrun time itself”

Oh, whoops. sorry!

I used to try explain everything in the first few chapters but got told I was info dumping….

So now I’m too scared to go back, and I don’t know how to explain everything without doing that!

Help???

well, I can say personally that I get annoyed w…[Read more]

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I read the last two chapters and that hit me hard too!!!

I almost cried….😭😭😭💔💔

I’m kinda cheering right now, even though I know that sounds really bad……..

I need to read it all the way through again!

Wow!! Really? That’s awesome!

So, what is your opinion on the end? should I leave it unknown like it is?

Thank you so m…[Read more]

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lol

OH, so this might be a real thing! *rubs hands together* KPers, watch out and grab a box of tissue.

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Ok, Jonas has a point, though he really does seem to be poking holes just for fun. lol. (I would be scared to death if he found my WIP, but then again the help would be gladly accepted after i stopped being a little frustrated. lol.)

He does have some good points though.

Also, from the perspective of someone who…[Read more]

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Aww, I love that chapter. Sef and Lilitu are adorable.

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Alriiight, Chapter 1. Please tell me if you get overwhelmed with all the feedback, because if that happens, I will gladly pause.

Her father wouldn’t meet her eyes. And in that instant she knew.

Her father didn’t love her.

Sooo I get this weird feeling about Nico. I’m not entirely convinced he doesn’t love them, nor do I kno…[Read more]