SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨

@savannah_grace2009 I’ve been catching up!

Very good so far, although this confused me a bit:

“Passing through Azer land,” the woman swung the tip of the flames towards them. Livia inhaled sharply as the heat collided with the moisture on her cheek, sizzling and popping loudly. “Drinking from Azer waters.”

I mean I understand they have to have s…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Yaayyy I’m glad that’s what you needed!! Awesome! <3 I was so worried for a second that it wasn’t.

you’re gonna make me cryyyy

Aw, don’t cry, I like critiquing and I thought it was a fun way to spend my time. :]

I’ll think about the things you mentioned and are struggling with, and if there’s something you need to brainstorm…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Why Eloy thoughhhh he kinda just drops off the face of the earth and isn’t relevant to the plot *cries* so you won’t be able to see him very much after a while hahaha

NoOoOo! 🥺 Too bad!! Idk he’s just funny to me lol.

I KNOWWWWWWWW

AHHHH that’s the most accurate thing anyone’s ever said about her hahaha

Lolol

@savannah_grace2009

AHHH YESSSS MARKY BOYYYY ( @esther-c your nickname stuck lol, no going back now!!! hahaha)

This makes me so happy 🤭🤣

Oh my word, reading through everyone’s comments…. aghhhh!!! I need to seriously start reading it, I’ve just been so busyyy 😭

@savannah_grace2009

*exhale* 

Snap doodle.

Just finished reading through all your chapters… man, I dont even know what to say…

Must read moreeeeee. WRITE WRITE WRITE!

Eloy is my favorite… Aubrielle is probably second. And, since he hasn’t done anything yet that I can see, Cassian is also a fav.

Liviaaaa, you be lusting, girlie…c…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Okay, well, I am reading! *Shoves all the motivation your way* I will give you some comments and some in-depth thoughts! Hopefully these are what you’re looking for.

Comments (as I’m going through) –

– Characters are very easy to picture, and not very easy to forget. XD So you’re good in that area.

– Prose flows smoothly…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 yay!

@savannah_grace2009 yep!

Got any more of your story yet?

I haven’t been checking, sorry.

@savannah_grace2009 yeahh!! it’s always great to have that sense of community.

@savannah_grace2009

I also just want to know that people are reading it, because it’s hard to write when you don’t know if people even care or are interested, if that makes sense. When I know people are reading it, it gives me so much more motivation!!

yessss this happens to me too. The I worked on for over half of 2024 and was the first fan…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Hey girl, sorry I haven’t really read more of your WIP yet.  I’ve been pretty busy (which is why I kind of vanished for a few days). I’ll try to read some more and get you some feedback sometime this week.

@savannah_grace2009

I dragged myself to co-op anyway. 🙁   I just finished your prologue. It’s good, but you overuse italics.

@savannah_grace2009

I’m a little late to responding, but as I was reading the things you shared, I just had a couple thoughts. Not sure if they’ll be helpful or not, but I figured I’d share anyway and let you decide lol.

One thing I noticed that could potentially be a lie (and maybe this fits more for future scenes after this all takes place) is…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Yeah, as long as you put a TW, I don’t think it matters.

Okay, perfect. First, have to clear out all of the uh… wonderful writing before posting it.

What?? XD

Lol, I was rewatching an episode from Martha Speaks (I don’t care if it’s for kids it’s one of the greatest shows ever), and this line really spoke to me.

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@savannah_grace2009

I’m glad it helped! I knew a lot of it was randomness, but when I can look at my difficulty in a new light, everything can start to click. Randomness that really doesn’t fit is typically what I use like. XD

I was trying to imply with that part, how Neveah’s heart broke for Sef. Putting myself in Neveah’s shoes, nothing wou…

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@savannah_grace2009

Wow. That’s dark. Pretty good story-wise, though. I’ll just go on a rabbit trail of plotting and hope it gives ideas. XD

I liked how you had Neveah try to combat the lie, and it’s obvious it’s for Sef’s sake, not her own. To make this sequence really work, maybe make Sef think her Mani is just trying to save herself – it’s…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ooo, lies. XD if I remember right, they want to start with little lies (because they’re more believable) and then work toward bigger lies with more power. So here are some ideas for chains of lies.

“You should be able to be strong enough on your own” (so when you falter, “you must be a failure” can follow)

“If God loved you,…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Can it be any lies or does it have to be something that has to do specifically with Pythonos? I’m not familiar enough with your stories to help if they have to be specific, but I might be able to give a few suggestions otherwise.