SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨

@savannah_grace2009

Marcurious as an eagle can carry people??? Must be a very large eagle!

@freedomwriter76 @savannah_grace2009

The biggest thing I noticed for critiquing was that it was kinda confusing with all the characters who was doing what. I got lost on who the soldiers were and who the slaves were in the first few paragraphs and kinda got lost on what everyone was doing whilst reading.

Yeah, I was a little worried about…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @rae

Ugh! I forgot about this today. Sorry! I’ll get to it as soon as I can!

@savannah_grace2009

Glad you like it! Of course!

@rae

yeah, sorry, My brain kinda died.

No, you’re fine. XD

Fynn

Fynn shoved his hands into his pockets as they fell into an awkward silence. Thankfully, he didn’t have to come up with anything to say as he saw Callista by the front doors standing next to a girl with blue hair and horse of the same color.

“Hey, Callie!”

She looked up and smi…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Here you go! Feel free to make any changes, I’m not sure if it’ll let you in that link but you can save it and edit.

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks!! She’s really fun to write. 😉

@euodia-vision @freedomwriter76

I forget too. XD We can just pretend Ami and Clint have met up with Bucky and Riya already, if you guys are ok with that.

@rae

(btw, Fynn and Lukas are friends, not brothers. 😉 Sorry I didn’t explain that earlier. 😅)

Fynn

“Thanks. I-I’m from Shyton.” Chase paused for a moment. “You?”

“Huh, never heard of Shyt…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @freedomwriter76

ha ha yeah… I’m counting them and so far I have 335…

They should get an award or something XD

lol

@savannah_grace2009 @jonas

I was thinking the same thing actually. They’re both pretty short, so perhaps you could add a chapter break, but even that isn’t necessary. I know why you did it, in order to have the chapter end on a good emotional climax, so I’d say you can do it either way, but it can still function as one whole scene.

@savannah_grace2009

I like this chapter as well! So for some reason I thought that the Andromedans were not aware of Earth, but if they are, and even know some random facts about it’s current modern day, including some sayings, then Fit as a Fiddle could become a common saying there.

@savannah_grace2009

I haven’t read it yet, but what I immediately thought is, do these have to be separate chapters? It looks like both are Sef chapters, and neither is particularly long, so I don’t see any specific reason to separate them. Like I said, I haven’t read it yet, so maybe there is one.

@savannah_grace2009

lol! Your the one that told me to do it, so…

It’s still up to you though😂

@mineralizedwritings

Yes, he basically broke hundreds of years of tradition and precedence.

@savannah_grace2009

Good! I plan to post more in the future.

@savannah_grace2009 @euodia-vision @jonas @rae

Do it lol

😆

h ttps://www.mote.com/m/darsdx5 (delete the space after the h)

Let me know if it doesn’t work.

@savannah_grace2009

I love it so far! The prose is beautiful, and the story is so good!

Yay! I’m glad!

@esther-c

Oh yeah ofc. I saw the post and I was like, “Welp, Euodia will probably want to hear all about this.” 😂

Haha, you know me very well. 😂

@rae

I think Andy should have gotten an award for how well he played Gollum.

AGREED!!!

@savannah_grace2009

Should I post the next one later today, or wait until tomorrow?

I’m good with whatever you decide!