SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨

@theshadow

Yeppp!!!

@elishavet-pidyon

I liked how you had Neveah try to combat the lie, and it’s obvious it’s for Sef’s sake, not her own. To make this sequence really work, maybe make Sef think her Mani is just trying to save herself – it’s not a lie about Sef, but it would make the former lie hit home. Make her really crumble since the last thing keeping the lie f…

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@elishavet-pidyon

wowww…that’s a lot to think about and really helpful!!! Thank you!

Here’s a little background on that scene…

yes, I know it is very sloppy and not perfect (I just wrote it literally today)

but here’s the cliffnotes:

• Sef is a slave of Iver, who is a Pythonos.
• Sef and Iver are currently in the throne room of the Master, leader of all Pythonos
• Iver has applied for a military position, and the Master is…

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@the_lost-journal

WHATTT
the chosen makes me wanna cry

it’s so good!!!! they portrayed it so well in my opinion hahaha

it’s my FAVORITE show of all time hahaha

@elishavet-pidyon

YES those are what I’m looking for!!!!
I will definitely be using those later in my book…

But I’m struggling with a specific scene where I need a lie XDXD and none of these seem to fit…

“Well, what are you waiting for?” the Master spat, motioning for Iver to continue. “You may begin whenever you are ready.”

Sef’s knees sho…

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@linus-smallprint

Okay good lol

Also, Paynes cannot become Pythonos because of genetics, but I’m not sure how to incorporate that in the book quite yet…don’t worry though, I’ll make that clearer in other drafts.

@esther-c

Okay perfect! Thank you!

@the_lost-journal

Aw I’m glad <3

Some of those were lies. what do you mean? You yourself said that they were lies.

yes, they are lies…

But they’re not the type of lies in my story…

agh I don’t know how to explain it, I’m sorry!!

@the_lost-journal

omc…you’re gonna make me cry…that’s so sad! I’m so sorry that people said that to you…I hope you know it’s not true and that NO ONE should EVER talk that way to another person! That makes me really mad actually, like why do people have to be so mean?!?

so I have experience with a lot of insults!

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@trailblazer

It needs to be lies that affect the way you think…but shorter. Like “you are nothing” will have more impact than “you are ugly/not beautiful” will…

I’m not really sure how to explain it, but I’m looking for short lies, not so much longer insults.

@linus-smallprint

Yes, but she didn’t become a Pythonos.

The Pythonos were going to take her mani for slavery and imprisonment.

Sef took her place as a slave.

@jonas

Don’t worry about it! That’s okay!

@linus-smallprint

Oh that’s okay!!!

Sef turns herself into the Pythonos

Wait, hold up…

Sef doesn’t turn into the Pythonos…she is enslaved by the Pythonos. I thought I made that clearer but if not can you give me suggestions to help with that? I don’t want to confuse anyone XD

@anyone

Also….

HELPPPP

I am in need of some ideas.

I need some lies that my characters could believe about themselves, like “you are worthless” or “you are nothing” that would give the Pythonos power.

I don’t know what to doooooo ahh

@grcr

AHHH that’s such a cool idea! I’ve never thought of that before!

@ellette-giselle

Oh wow…

My heart hurts for you guys 🥺🥺

@ellette-giselle

Oh noooo! Girl I’m so sorry *hugs* <3

I’ll be praying for you guys….

@grcr

Okay!!!

I understand being busy!!! If you don’t have time don’t worry about it!

I was just kind of confused since I haven’t heard anything from anyone about my draft for like three weeks 😂😂

@theducktator

Okay, sounds good!!!!
Aw girl I’m sorry you’re sick :/

I hope you feel better!