Andrew

@smiley

Well….. I’m also an author, and there are only two kinds of authors: “those who are insane, and those who are good at hiding it”

Soooo….. I may have proved them right. XD

Honestly, being the oldest can be tough! I always, always wanted an older brother. I pick older brothers out of books to be my fictional older brothers and…[Read more]

@smiley

Hey Smiley! You’re right, it has been a while since we’ve seen you. I hope you’re doing well and enjoying life <3

I think that’s one reason why I’m re introducing myself so I can kind of “start over” not that all those conversations and terrible writing didn’t matter but instead I think it grew me and I still have fond memories of the…

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@smiley

Greetings! Welcome back!

@smiley

Hello! I’m Ellette!

I think I’ve seen a few of your things while stocking KP before I became a member.

I guess I’ll introduce myself.

I’m a homeschool Senior. I’m reformed Baptist/Covenantor

I’m the oldest in my family.

I write Novels and Short stories, (I do some songs and poems, but they are generally for my story) I write fiction…[Read more]

@hybridlore

btw, I’m surprised the protection squad isn’t out in full force yet.

I guess Koshka and Elishiavet are behind.

@hybridlore

Yes, I am interested in what he says. It may just be a girl thing to catch stuff like that and it might go right over his head.

@hybridlore

Okay, so I have a question. Would you have still called it if Amelia hadn’t brought up wanting a baby in the letter to Sabina?

Did you call it the whole time, or was there any point that you actually thought she was sick.

Should I cut out the baby part in the letter to make this scene more stressful, or no?

 

Oh boy… this is n…

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Ah, yes. Let’s see, where were we?

It looks like Ben, Flare, Baron, Jenna, and Ellis are in one group in the middle of the city, with Felicity having just run off. @raxforge @rae @loopylin

Rina, Klethen, Ilahna, Jirah, Rosemary, and Rapha are on the ship with Fleet, heading out of the city. (I believe Rosemary and Rapha fell off and are…[Read more]

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12/28/24

Section 1.

(hopefully that will make it easier for anyone behind to organize these parts.) 😉

if this section was too long, then I can cut them down. Just let me know.

NEXT SECTION

The next morning, Joseph awoke to the banging of the back do…

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@freed_and_redeemed

This is good! I like this scene!

Wait, hang on……. you got him stuck there and now you don’t know what to do?!?!

Haha…… I may or may not have done that to a character before………

Honestly, George doesn’t seem very stable at the moment, If Riker gets out of the room and George follows and trips over something…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Happy Belated Birthday! 🎂🎊🎈

Thank you!

I have finished the book. I was tearing up at the end. Charles was one of my favorites. I still haven’t given up hope that he will be saved in the next book, even though I know he won’t. That hymn was so beautiful and definitely fitting. I’ll try to get to the questions soon, but it…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint lol that raccoon

@linus-smallprint

You’re very welcome.

Also, why does that racoon picture have an expression that so fits what I know of you? lolololol.

@linus-smallprint

I have the same thought as Hybrid here. Beric has not only been independent for a while now, but he is also a teen. I’m glad you included the scene of his struggle to listen.

Thanks. It actually wasn’t in the first or second draft. I had a reference made to it in the third, but I thought I should flush it out into a full s…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thank you very much for the feedback! I will get to reading through it later.

@whalekeeper

I think she’s really fun, but I’ll talk about it in the long feedback post. 😊

@ellette-giselle

Good section! I was going to say, it seems weird that Beric would change so quickly, but now I see he’s still going to struggle.

I have the same thought as Hybrid here. Beric has not only been independent for a while now, but he is also a teen. I’m glad you included the scene of his struggle to listen.

The soup began to hiss, so A…

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@linus-smallprint

Sounds good!

I’ll see if I can get at least one of your new sections done today.

Wonderful!! Thanks! Looking forward to it!

@linus-smallprint

Also, what about Andrew Peterson’s Carry the Fire? We both agreed on that one.

Okay yeah, we did. That one is a great song.

Oh, looks like you mentioned the editor question. Ignore my second offer. I thought you might have missed it.Glad you found a good person for the job!

😉

@linus-smallprint

I don’t know how to send doc. links. so, here are my answers.

The Narrow Path Trilogy: Book One – The Cost Feedback Questions

Character

~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

Alan. Because he was the redemption character, and I LOVE redemption characters. If you look at my…[Read more]