Andrew

@freed_and_redeemed

I have this forum open on my laptop. I’m gonna tag you to see if you’re able to find it again. If not, oh well. Just thought I’d give it a try! 😉

@the_lost-journal

You can also do that but do “is this a female” because that seems to be popular theme XD

(where this super cool person is wearing a mask and then they remove their mask and its a GIRL 😮

Immediately comes to mind…….

@whalekeeper

Oh, did you have a subplot POV on the side following the rescue?

No, two of my side characters were spies and they kept reporting the enemy and allies movements back to the MC. Plus, at one point when the MC was captured two of the officers get a message and kind of act startled. They leave the room, but the reader hardly notices…[Read more]

@koshka

 Liko could get stuff done, right? The fellow certainly had enough hands.

*snorts*

@loopylin

Ooh, I like Terry. The problem with names from this era is that so many of them are taken by adults I know. XD

@koshka

uh yeah! Poor kid needs it!
(I gotta work a Leo into his actual book.)

he’s gotta enough hands! Pfft!

Rory

Rory smiled slightly. Sometimes Leo’s words completely flummox him, but Rory had learned to read tone and body language over words long ago. He wasn’t exactly sure what Leo meant, but he understood the tone.
“so… what do you ne…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Not that I hate that, but I don’t love it either. I want them to just beat the bad guys already.

Exactly. I want it, but only as a subplot, not as the main thing.

@ellette-giselle

Uh, big brother mode just got activated.

Leo

Rory looked… lonely. Leo reached over and ruffled the kid’s hair, not stopping to think that he was probably too old for that. He needed a childhood. “Welp, now you’re stuck with me too, so I guess you’ll see how blessed Quincy is.”

He laughed and scooped up a handful of metal…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @theducktator yesss I love KOTLC’s worldbuilding (despite a few points on which I’m like “um, no, that totally breaks immersion, sorry”) but the romance is pretty much half the plot now if not most of it.

Not that I hate that, but I don’t love it either. I want them to just beat the bad guys already.

@whalekeeper

Ugh. The series was good through book 6, but the romantic drama has kind of taken over, and I don’t think Shannon Messenger has any idea what she’s doing anymore.

@koshka

Rory shrugged. “I don’t know what siblings are supposed to look like. I don’t even know if I have any of my own.” He shrugged again and picked out a few more screws. “Quincey is a fortunate boy,” he said, softly.

@ellette-giselle

Leo

Leo chuckled and shook his head. “Do we look related? But I’m the one who pulled the little monkey from a shelled out hole, so I guess I have as much right to claim him as anyone else.”

He leaned back against the couch.

@koshka

Rory

Most People would have been taken aback. But not Rory. Leo’s story sounded pretty normal. In fact, better than what he’d always known.
but one thing snapped our attention him like the crack of a whip. “Wait a moment… Quincey isn’t related to you? I thought you said he was your brother!”

@ellette-giselle

Oh goodness yes. XD

Leo

Soldier. Yes…and no. Another sigh caught in his throat.

“Yes, but no. I don’t really know what I’m doing here.” He leaned back against the couch. The floor felt cold through his work pants.

“I was apprenticed to Admiral S. Faltack at twelve years old as a novice engineer. Silvia’s always been smart,…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

I like the changes!! I’d just caution you to have more new conflicts than old. It’s easy to fall into the old loop. Instead think of challenges they will face as they try to build a friendship, rather than a loop of old struggles.

Just a little heads up! (I’ve had to learn the hard way and I hoped to pass on some of that…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

haha, well, I am a lover of well done death scenes. Especially if the characters and author is a Believer, otherwise it’s a little depressing.

hmmm, well, I just can’t stand cheesy rescue/escape scenes.

uh… let’s see.
Faramir. Don’t know if you’ve read LOTR, but his rescue and recovery makes sense. Gandalf saved him, and Pippin…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Agreed. I do think she and Keefe are cute together though. I just wish it would stay a side plot.